A Cloudy Moon

art ~ Karol Bak

 

~~~

It is gray

when winds of dawn blow from aching rivers

and the roses wither in the mist

as the rain meets the tide

 

It is quiet

when silence speaks and deaf ears hold

only the whisper of the clouds

covering the moon

 

Forgive the clouds

 

as the rain falls upon our golden bed

of lavender scents and pairing birds

and peach blooms rising

like a thousand torches

shining

in the wake of this cloudy moon

 

(rest and hope for this)

 

Yes,

it is gray and it is quiet…

 

Forgive the clouds

~~~

Author's Note

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Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Atmospheric. I liked it but may I make some small observations.
Roses bloom in June onwards, at least in UK. Peaches blossom early spring and lavender june/July onwards. Birds pair in very early spring also. As a gardener I'd notice these things conflicting in your poem. HOWEVER that does not detract from the lovely descriptive flow of the poem. Forgive me the criticism. Mad Englishman

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your suggestions. I live in sunny southern California. My roses and lavender blooms all year long - and the birds are here 12 months a year as well. Although it must be lovely to watch the seasons change - it doesn't happen here... It is sunny and warm and then from time to time a rain shower...Thank you for your lovely comment. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Since Christmas we've had 45 days of rain here. looking forward to some sunshine.

[MsJewel]

Sending you some California sunshine!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Think it arrived this morning. thanks. They've given minus 7 for tonight. Wet tomorrow and Sunday. AGAIN.

[Tom]

Despite the inclement weather outside, all is well and embracing beneath the duvet of love !

An enchanting, image intensifying write, splendid indeed !

[B.J]

Accepting the world as it come and is delivered. So beautifully written

[MsJewel]

Thank you Barb :) Julie

[B.J]

Your welcome

[JLavender]

"It is quiet
when silence speaks and deaf ears hold
only the whisper of the clouds
covering the moon"

Favorite part of the poem. Full of imagery, and I do believe in forgiving the clouds, for it's only in their nature to rain and cover the moon.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[Leigh]

When the clouds half cover the moon its like looking at the special effects of a horror movie for free. Your words weave a magical scene.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Leigh :) Julie

[ron]

The clouds would be forgiven with such a lovely poem as this.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron :) Julie

[ron]

Your welcome Julie :)

[Trace]

I think I like it more this time.
it somehow holds more meaning.

L.Y.
Trace

[MsJewel]

LY too...Hugs, Julie

[Jack...]

Love this one Julie...a perfect fit to the dark cold blustery cloudy morning sitting before me. It sure did make it so much more bearable. Stunningly beautiful my friend, the entire feel of this piece captured me.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Jack. Hurry spring...I'll send you some Southern California sunshine! Hugs, Julie

[Saddam]

as the rain falls upon our golden bed
of lavender scents and pairing birds
and peach blooms rising.

A beautiful skech you draw in mind with this aura I can feel Magh Varsa on my roof.
Great write dear.

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweetie! :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, forgive the clouds, it is their job to hold and release rain...

forgive others who hurt us, maybe it is their job to inflict pain

just so that we can be tested in life.

you always say it with such beautiful imagery.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your insightful review Jacob. Sometimes I need to remind myself it's not that difficult to forgive...forgetting is the hard part. Have a beautiful day my friend :) Julie

[redflutterby]

Sigh....your pen flows with the most beautiful words. I agree with Frieda...you are the mistress of love scribbles. So delicate and smooth....vibrant with the colors of love even when it is grey. Lovely Julie!!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. It means a lot to me :) Julie