Cat and Mouse

~ prelude to Trace's "Hearts Desire" ~

 

 

 

Blue eyes meet brown across the dimly lit room

a quick glance…just a glimpse

held for a heartbeat

as shy smiles are exchanged

 

She averts her eyes, studying the cocktail napkin

tucked neatly under her wine glass

 

Glancing up again

brown eyes have still held the gaze and his smile remains

She looks away

crossing and uncrossing her long legs

 

Not uncomfortable

….breathless…

 

Slowly lifting her wine glass to her lips, she looks over again

He is speaking with the bartender,

his sparkling brown eyes peeking through the waves of dark hair

boyishly falling across his forehead

 

Handsome

refined

a gentlemen

He glances back toward her

 

She looks away quickly

as perfectly painted nails stroke the long stem of her wine glass,

a fevered blush staining her cheeks

 

~ A cat and mouse game has begun ~

 

The butterflies have taken wing

starting in her throat

fluttering in her stomach

Tucking a long strand of gold hair behind a jeweled ear,

she looks up again

 

He’s gone!

 

A soft sigh is released from her berry lips

Disappointment

an unexplained hint of sadness

maybe next time

 

Suddenly

a red rose appears

next to her wine glass

 

Looking up

she is startled by those same brown eyes

"More wine?" he asks with a smile

 

 

Author's Note

Art by Fabian Perez
This is the prelude to Trace's "Hearts Desire"
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1319422/#comment-3296431

Reviews

[Saddam]

A marvelous piece...A long poem but a whole story contain. I like this cat and mouse play because I am a part of it too. Mostly amazing moment is this
Looking up
she is startled by those same brown eyes
"More wine?" he asks with a smile
Wow.... I love this surprisingly appearence. Love this most.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ssadd. Trace has the man's perspective posted on his page. I hope you have a chance to read it :) Julie

[RichGee]

Enticingly seductive with great taste...Giggling Star was correct in admiring your art.
I'm so happy she referred me to your work.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comments on my poetry today :) Julie

[RichGee]

My pleasure Julie.

[cycy]

wow,what a poem, i loved this one a lot Julie, kept me reading, builds up curiosity and anticipation in such a classic way, and i love the way you described all the intricate details right down to the last bit. well done, wonderfully written. so much talent shining through this great poem. loved it :) :) :)

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much! Your comment truly has made my day! :) Julie

[Traci]

You and Trace write beautifully together, two individuals who truly understand the pure essence of romance/love. I enjoyed this piece, and look forward to reading "Hearts Desire" and Act 2.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[The Representative]

The form, with which you Julie mirrors the sense of scene which is being described.


Reading this, reminds me of Alicia's writing, another poet who posts for this site....if you haven't already, take a look at hers - Alicia Huntley.

Yours and her writing both exude conviction, and compliment meaning.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment. I have not read Alicia's writing, but I will make sure to look her up. :) Julie

[Baby Ricochet]

Oh boy! What happens next?

[MsJewel]

stay tuned...

[Brittany Zedalis]

The feeling you describe here is how I felt the first time I saw the man who ended up marrying me. Great job.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Brittany :) Julie

[wordman]

the prelude to a romance in the makings great graphics as well

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron :) Julie

[A. Amos]

Good one Julie love the art, beautiful combo of words and art...good start of the day...thank you

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) julie

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Julie... I remember playing cat and mouse.
Very much like a "Play"...the first act is shy and
suggestive... the intermission... sad. The final act
as beautiful as a red rose of passion. truly.. Intimate...
Pat

[MsJewel]

Pat, Thank you for your sweet comment. Trace wrote the scene from the man's view in a poem called "Hearts Desire". :) Julie

[Raymond Federle]

Love at first sight? You are a true classical romantic my friend...so very rare these days! Never lose that fire! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Raymond - I do believe in love at first sight! :) Julie