Starlight

~ a romantic poem written in an Octelle form ~

art ~ Vincent van Gogh

 

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As softly as a lover’s sigh

the stars sang in the moonlit sky

sweet melodies in the night

that woke the clocks with delight

as our hearts in soft embrace

breathed words of silk and of lace

as softly as a lover’s sigh

the stars sang in the moonlit sky

 

~~~

 

With honey lips, as sweet as wine

my hand in his, his hand in mine

we traced a dream on this night

as passion played soft starlight

and in his arms I will stay

always to love him this way

with honey lips, as sweet as wine

my hand in his, his hand in mine…

 

~~~

Author's Note

The Octelle is a form created by Emily Romano. It has eight lines and the rhyme scheme is aabbccaa, the syllable count is 88777788. The first two lines are repeated as the last two lines. What further sets the form, in its description, is using personification and symbolism in a telling manner. You may have as many verses as you wish as long as they follow the same rules.

Reviews

[Trace]

It seems for a short time every year I know who is on your mind
as your poetry is a clear window to your heart and soul.
I know how much he meant to you and my heart goes out to you my dear friend.
This is a wonderful expression of your talent and it holds so much meaning.
I am so sorry for your loss.

My love always.
Trace

[MsJewel]

You know me so well....and I'm thankful for a friend like you. Thank you for supporting my poetry. Hugs, Julie

[Trevor Barnett]

Your words are as beautiful as the paint strokes of Van Gogh! Excellent write!

[MsJewel]

You are so sweet Trevor. Thank you :) Julie

[Ian Faraway]

This was beautiful and I'm a huge fan of this piece of art. I'm not an art fan, exactly, but there's something so hypnotically beautiful about Starlight that I can't help to enjoy it. As for the poem. It was short and simple but very powerful. The repetition of the first and last two lines in each stanza simply reinforced it's meaning and doubled its impact on me. Almost breathtaking. It's very rare to blow me away with words but the imagery created along with the added art piece made it hard not to be. Keep writing. -Faraway-

[MsJewel]

You have made my night with your very kind comment and compliment. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this poem. The octelle form isn't easy, but it is one of my favorites. :) Julie

[Ian Faraway]

Well you've made it look like it's the easiest thing in the world. I applaud its outcome. -Faraway-

[ferousfinite]

Great Design! .... =) .......

[Rossen]

feather ly words softened by rhyme fixed syllables keeping the time
well put sweet job.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[ANM]

The Octelle is quite hard to do you have done it very well , starry starry night certainly sprang to mind!

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[ferousfinite]

Gorgeous! I love this piece!

[MsJewel]

Thanks again :) Julie

[adreamer]

With so much tenderness you express your heart and soul for someone who was your whole world to you so beautifully Julie. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your sweet comment Larry :) Julie

[s y e]

Girl, your poetry is simply perfection. What more can I say?

// as passion played soft starlight
and in his arms I will stay
always to love him this way //

Like I said before, your poetry captures me and tries to keep me here.... How I wish I could.

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thank you. :) Julie

[Shaquana Adams]

With honey lips, as sweet as wine
my hand in his, his hand in mine

I love these repeated lines. You make me want to try this form. Very beautifully written Julie :)

[Raymond Federle]

"As softly as a lover’s sigh the stars sang in the moonlit sky" You had me with the first line... excellent! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Raymond! :) Julie