Romance

~ a love poem written in a Lai form ~

 

art ~ garmash

 

~~~

Mesmerized it’s true

by your eyes of blue

one glance

and I can’t construe

what one look will do

perchance

this is love, though new

I should give in to

romance

 

It could be divine

if your love were mine

thoughts of

your kiss sweet like wine

as our hearts entwine

in love

I’ll watch for a sign

the stars to align

above

 

Still, if the night grew

stars bid us adieu

your glance

stirs me through and through

what else can I do

but chance

something perhaps true

for me and for you…

romance

~~~

Author's Note

The Lai is a french form of poetry. Each verse consists of nine lines with a syllable count of 5/5/2/5/5/2/5/5/2 and a rhyme pattern of aa/b/aa/b/aa/b.

Reviews

[Saddam]

every time you write that's a new form and style and most of all a unique concept. I learn from you new forms and try them to do...but failed... That is the true romance which i feel right now.
Beautiful....nah... splendid art you have to describe. thanks for sharing. Love you.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for supporting my poetry. I appreciate you. As far as forms go, keeping trying them - they can be fun :) Julie

[wordman]

well I don`t know one from the other but I`m learning from you

[Jack...]

Extremely beautiful Julie, as I have come to expect and always find when I visit your page.

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet Jack. Thank you for the lovely comment and compliment :) Julie

[Blue]

Must be hard to write in this form! I applaud you, Julie.

[MsJewel]

Actually it really is a pretty simple form. It kind of writes itself once you get started. Thanks for the wonderful comment :) Julie

[A. Amos]

Julie your soul mind and heart is full of romance, love and honesty. As your persoanlity reflects in your poems. Your husband i hope is proud of you, just like us your poet pals. Amazing piece

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment. No husband though... :) Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

Julie... A lovely Lai penned with tenderness
and delicate rhyme... in a garden of fragile
flowers and blue eyes entrancing with
promises implied. truly... Pat

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet Pat. Thank you for supporting my little love scribbles. :) Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

Julie... I adore your love scribbles.. By the way I posted a poem recently about light illuminating from a new star entitled Pastel Lanterns etc. hugs... Pat

[Sami Khalil]

You give romance a stir through and through even if the hearts are blue. You hold love as a divine sign and make worth the waiting time...Excellent...:)......................

[MsJewel]

So sweet Sami. thank you! :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)..................

[Brittany Zedalis]

You're a very talented writer, and this piece is even more proof of that.
:]

[MsJewel]

Thank you dear one! :) Julie

[Giggling Star]

This is so very pretty ... I'll watch for a sign ... the stars to align ... above. That pretty much says it all when it comes to love and romance. MsJewel you are a wonder :)

[MsJewel]

You are too kind. Thank you for your lovely comments and compliments. I appreciate you! :) Julie

[Trace]

Perhaps......romance, for me and you. given the chance,,,,

One can wish on the moon and stars,
And two can dream, as we both do,,,,
It would be divine, dreams do come true,
Perhaps one day for me and you.

You bring such a lovely poem to life with your talent.
WOW,,,,,
Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you Trace. Your comments are poetry my sweet friend. Hugs, Julie

[wordman]

I never knew how many forms of poetry there were Julie until I started to read all of yours
a great job as usual

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. :) Julie

[MAC]

wow, too challenging for me. this is very impressive. following a pattern and yet writing brilliant poetry. just wow.

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Mark. Thank you for the wonderful comment :) Julie