Outside Your Door

photograph by skiwasser65

 

 

Lost in the shadows, a single heart that grieves

                              too deeply to tell

 

            this stranger to your night

 

I shiver

in a breeze to cool to kiss away the tears

 

I close my eyes

   and yet I stare into the eyes of passion,

           the eyes of truth

                            eyes that dare not meet

 

                    in the shadows

   outside your door

 

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a highly emotive and intriguing write, Julie! If there is passion there, you can not disguise it. It will not go away by closing your eyes... the truth will come out. “In the shadows”...hmmm....brings to mind desire that is verboten. A poem with hidden meanings...and the graphic is the perfect one to accompany your words. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment Lydi. Have a lovely evening my friend :) Julie

[Jack...]

Very sad Julie, but still that beauty that always seems to find me when I visit your page is staring me right in the eyes. Very nice.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Jack. I appreciate you! :) Julie

[Frieda P]

You wrapped your pen around melancholy this time around Julie, yet it's still your lovely, straight forward style that I love. Sounds like unrequited love....well done as always. :-)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very sweet comment Frieda. Have a beautiful day! :) Julie

[Frieda P]

Always a pleasure Julie, you too! :-)

[Saddam]

Lost in the shadows, a single heart that
grieves
too deeply to tell
so deep feelings whome you love most.
exactly which I want to find in any other poetry.
lovely awsome piece of true art.
loveya.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment Ssadd. Hugs, Julie

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Profound and dark......
I really liked it........very well crafted!
:) v)

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! Thanks so much! :) Julie

[Diana]

"eyes that dare not meet

in the shadows
outside your door"- The shadows are ambiguous in this one. Is it shyness, fear, or something else that keeps her in the shadows?

[MsJewel]

A little of all of the above I'm afraid. Thanks so much Diana :) Julie

[Trace]

This is so terribly powerful. Sad, chilling and heartbreakingly good.

Where you find your inspiration for some of your poetry is frightening.

Very good poetry my friend,
Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you Trace Hugs, Julie

[wordman]

a profound write of passion or guilt or maybe even regret

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your insightful comment Ron :) Julie

[Trevor Barnett]

This poem has a very cold air to it when I read it. Very well done Julie!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Trevor :) Julie

[Pryde Foltz]

I close my eyes
and yet I stare into the eyes of passion,
the eyes of truth
eyes that dare not meet

in the shadows
outside your door

I wonder is it shyness or shame that keeps our heroine in the shadows. Intriguing.

[MsJewel]

Perhaps a bit of both Pryde. :) Julie

[Raymond Federle]

Cool and dark. Excellent! :)

[MsJewel]

thank you Raymond! :) Julie