Captivated

a little love scribble

Art ~ Henry Asencio

 

~~~

Mesmerized, captured
in rapture, it's true
lost in the beauty
of all that is you

hypnotized, breathless
from where I am love
you have captured
my every thought of...

romance and passion
and pale midnight skies
where starlight just dims
in the light of your eyes

and soft visions dance
in rose petal dreams
falling from the sky
on silver moonbeams

and I’ve fallen too
with every heartbeat
from where I am now
this feeling so sweet

has me mesmerized
fascinated with you
and dreaming that I’ve
captivated you too

~~~

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

This rhyming is so rhythmically perfect and so well paced with the theme -in other words, the timing of when new concepts come in is very regular and fitted to the rhythm of the words. This is very effective! You seem to be a master of when to rhyme and when not to...and I am jealous. It is hard to always know when a structure is needed and when it isn't, at least for me! Great ending as well. Overall this is just such a thematically complete poem, that is is a real pleasure! Thanks!!

[MsJewel]

You are so sweet Robby. Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. You made my day! :) Julie

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

It's really true!! This is a beautiful use of the structure of rhyming and of using that structure to further the meaning of your work!

[Personne]

Ah, it's so cute and lovey dovey it is great! It sums up the feeling of being captivated by someone, and it is great. :) I also really like how you included that the speaker wants the other person to be captivated with them too; it was a nice little detail that I enjoyed. This whole poem was just lovely and cute and true. Made me smile :)

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for your wonderful comment. :) Julie

[Zaniken]

I quite enjoyed your story, every line kept me interested.

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Bob Sherunkle]

That was just beautiful,truly beautiful.Makes me want to find love

[MsJewel]

Thank you Bob :) Julie

[wordman]

I`m glad that you finally realized it Julie you know I`ve been working on you for a while lol
by the way the poem was wonderful one of your best

[MsJewel]

Your comments always leave me with a smile Ron. Have a wonderful weekend. :) Julie

[Baby Ricochet]

That's some little love scribble

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thank you :) Julie

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Vibrant write, Julie!
I am Mesmerized, as well...

This is a work of art at it's finest... sweet and savory melt together nicely, here...~xoxo~

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very sweet comment Robbie. Hugs, Julie

[MOON]

Beautiful write , elegant and romantic.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[ron]

I think this poem captivated us all MsJewel. This is the kind of poem that makes the reader feel is if love really can happen.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment Ron! :) Julie

[ron]

You are most welcome Julie :)

[Rosaria_V]

Lovely read. I truly am inspired :)

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled this one inspired you . Thank you for supporting my poetry :) Julie

[Trace]

Oh yes it's true
you've captivated me too
with every line.....with every heartbeat
your poetry is brilliant..and ever so sweet

I just love this poem
and it was beautiful hearing in in person
your poetry is captivating and mesmerizing
and I'm hooked.

LY.. Trace

[MsJewel]

Your comment mean so much to me Trace. Thank you for supporting my poetry and thank you for your friendship. Hugs, Julie