Captivated

a little love scribble

Art ~ Henry Asencio

 

~~~

Mesmerized, captured
in rapture, it's true
lost in the beauty
of all that is you

hypnotized, breathless
from where I am love
you have captured
my every thought of...

romance and passion
and pale midnight skies
where starlight just dims
in the light of your eyes

and soft visions dance
in rose petal dreams
falling from the sky
on silver moonbeams

and I’ve fallen too
with every heartbeat
from where I am now
this feeling so sweet

has me mesmerized
fascinated with you
and dreaming that I’ve
captivated you too

~~~

Reviews

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

This rhyming is so rhythmically perfect and so well paced with the theme -in other words, the timing of when new concepts come in is very regular and fitted to the rhythm of the words. This is very effective! You seem to be a master of when to rhyme and when not to...and I am jealous. It is hard to always know when a structure is needed and when it isn't, at least for me! Great ending as well. Overall this is just such a thematically complete poem, that is is a real pleasure! Thanks!!

[MsJewel]

You are so sweet Robby. Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. You made my day! :) Julie

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

It's really true!! This is a beautiful use of the structure of rhyming and of using that structure to further the meaning of your work!

[Sasha]

This writing is absolutely amazing!

Loved it !

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment Sasha :) Julie

[A. Amos]

has me mesmerized
fascinated with you
and dreaming that I’ve
captivated you too

Your ending is heart of your poetry, loved it.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is amazing. I ended up reading it more than once. Definitely one of my favorites.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Brittany. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! :) Julie

[Shaquana Adams]

I loved every part of this. The word play was superb. Thanks for sharing!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie

[Shaquana Adams]

You're welcome :)

[Scott Metro]

A very romantic weave...you do do what you do well.
Enjoyed the heart pouring much.

Scott

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind words Scott. :) Julie

[Scott Metro]

Always my pleasure Julie..
S.

[Frieda P]

A captivating love scribble from your pen Julie, you always capture the essence of pure romance. :-)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment Frieda. I appreciate you! :) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

romance and passion
and pale midnight skies
where starlight just dims
in the light of your eyes

and soft visions dance
in rose petal dreams
falling from the sky
on silver moonbeams

lovely imagery :)
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[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Solilokiss]

Bravo, Julie! All I can say is more, more, more. So love your poetry.

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thank you for your wonderful comment :) Julie