Red

 

photograph compliments of janedoe.com

 

 

Through pastel skies and sunlit beams

and fluffy clouds and autumn dreams

a leaf fluttered as warm wind blew...

My fragile heart it fluttered too

Through brilliant dawns and pearly dews
and pumpkin scents and gorgeous hues
of bright rainbows above my head
and leaves that fell in brilliant red

As autumn fades slowly from sight
and paints the sky her soft twilight

tree branches bend, lonely above

no shades of warmth, no shades of love

And rising winds that once blew warm
now with a chill take all the charm
of the season, now gone from sight...
An autumn moon hangs low tonight

So as I watch the changing sky
I shiver as the snowflakes fly
but I think I will dream instead
of warmer hues in shades of red

Reviews

[Solitary Traveler]

It is quite wild the color that starts this poem, but how it seems to end in grey, and sadness. I loved the start, and though Autumn is not my favorite time of the year, as it is when life is going to sleep, it is a colorful time. It is also a romantic time of year. Forest walks, leaves underfoot, a chill in the air so you have to cuddle close to a companion. then winter falls. All that's left is the dream. I liked it. Well written.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment. :) Julie

[R. L. Hill]

This is really beautiful. I love how you captured the seasons. Your third stanza is something wonderful :

"As autumn fades slowly from sight/and paints the sky her soft twilight/tree branches bend, lonely above/no shades of warmth, no shades of love."

Stunning, truly. I am probably a broken record when it comes to pointing out that I am not the hugest fan of rhyming poetry. I have little to zero talent for it myself, but you've captured the style and made it your own.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment. When I started writing poetry, I only wrote in rhyme and forms - only recently (over the past few years) venturing into prose poems. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this piece and look forward to reading your poetry. :) Julie

[R. L. Hill]

I just read a bit of your prose style poems and they have captured my heart equally. I hope you enjoy mine just as much as I enjoy yours.

[love, lorey]

Love this! Reason #1: You have brilliant writing style! Quite lovely. Reason #2: I may or may not be completely obsessed with Fall. *cough* I can neither confirm, nor deny.

But, this is truly gorgeous. :) Brava.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment - I'm a summer girl to be honest, and the winter is sneaking in a little too quickly this year. :) Julie

[Diana]

Red, the color of love and warmth and love... A simple, but effective piece.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Diana. It feels like winter here in southern California...I just got used to fall! :) Julie

[Diana]

Hah hah. Don't move to Ohio, Julie. I was really excited because it was in the 50's today...

[MsJewel]

oh my...now I feel guilty for complaining about 68 degrees....

[MAC]

dang I wish I wrote this ~L~ would be an excellent addition to my "RED" book and way better than anything I wrote. Also that pic would make for a great cover for it. Hey Julie, look over there (yeah borrowing it would be wrong...right?) ~L~. okay so enough kidding, this is an amazing write just lovely.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Mark. - you can borrow the picture! Seriously - thank you for supporting my poetry. It means a lot to me. :) Julie

[MAC]

I really was just kidding about borrowing and you are welcome. Your poetry comes off as sincere and well it is always beautiful so the pleasure of reading and supporting you is mine :)

[MsJewel]

Thanks again. :)