Midnight Madness

a collaboration with my friend Trace

 

 

 

Black Friday Midnight Special! Big Screens three hundred bucks!

Wow!  What a terrific deal…I guess I have good luck

I’m tired of watching Housewives on my little black and white

Fifty-two inches of color would be such a delight!

 

Its ten degrees at midnight, we might as well have snow

And the line I’m standing in just seems to grow and grow

Four long hours later, the doors swing open wide

I wipe the ice off my nose as we crowd inside

 

Grandma’s there with Grandpa and Aunt Alice too

She brought all her children and she has a few

My neighbors and the postman, the preacher and his wife

Are running through the store..hang on for dear life!

 

The shopping carts are blazing down isles made for two

High pitched squeals and pushing to find something brand new

A sea of bodies finds me, claustrophobia I dread

Big screens are out on aisle six…great, that’s straight ahead

 

This is pure insanity, everyone wants the same

I see the one I really need…this is such a wicked game

Because as I reach the front, I can see the sign

SORRY WE ARE ALL SOLD OUT, BETTER LUCK NEXT TIME!

 

I can’t believe my eyes! How could this be the case?

I’m staring at the Preacher with a big grin on his face

It appears he got the last one and he’s not letting go

I am mad as hell right now…I’m gonna let him know

 

But as I approach him, I can’t help but ponder

Was it my Sunday donation that put me asunder?

If I had kept the money, would I have been the one

Holding that new big screen and having much more fun

 

So now that I have wasted the best hours of the day

I drag my sorry butt back home, wondering how much I’ll pay

For the big screen of my dreams, I can’t take anymore

There goes that black and white shattered on the floor!

 

steve neaves photography

Author's Note

A collaboration with Trace based on a Black Friday shopping experience - never did buy that big screen

Reviews

[Trace]

Tis the season to go crazy in the isles again.

I already bought my large screen TV on sale
Then the next day the price dropped another $60.00.

Hope new writers get to enjoy this great collaboration
and others get to laugh at this piece.

So enjoyed writing this with you.

HUGGS. . Trace

[MsJewel]

I'm skipping Black Friday this year...not into the crowds..this was a fun collab though...
Hugs, J

[Trace]

It is so sad.... I have to work on Friday.

I will miss all the fun...

[ferousfinite]

lol! I didn't celebrate the corporate parade. A playful piece, nicely written.

[MsJewel]

Thank you! Happy Holidays! :) Julie

[ferousfinite]

Happy Hallowthanksmas!!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Trace and Julie, this one has me smiling. Sorry you didn't get the TV....do you think the preacher had divine inspiration? Not sure if "isle" is a typo or if you meant to spell it that way because on a crazy sale day, it can seem like you have to travel the aisles to get to an "isle" of reduced prices. The rhyming is delightful and so rhythmic. As always, the two of you blend words seamlessly. Lots of laughs in this one. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

No it was typo Lydi - although this actually happened last year - I think my brain is still scrambled from the experience. Never again! Thanks for the great comment! :) Julie

[Leigh]

TVs are getting bigger while peoples minds shrink, this is a good fun write

[MsJewel]

Wise words here my friend. :) Julie

[Leigh]

Maybe, your poem although presented in an amusing style is highly relevant social commentary. Being an old rocker it was actually Black Sabbath Friday ;-)

[Tom]

Nothing breaks a family community up quicker than money, indeed I further contend that's when we truly know who are real friends are !

A fun poem, nice flow and rhyme all appropriately wrapped up with a heartfelt, quite profound story!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Tom :) Julie

[wordman]

and that's exactly why we did not shop Friday lol and you hit the nail right on the head

[MsJewel]

Good for you Ron! Happy Holidays my friend! Hugs, Julie

[Pryde Foltz]

A big screen TV, no not too much to ask
but I say get big computer screen
and then make it multitask

[MsJewel]

You have the right idea Pryde - unfortunately I left with a blanket and the DVD Bridesmaides - so much for the tv. :) Julie

[Baby Ricochet]

Cute poem jewel. My dream is to have a tv big enough to park my truck in front of and play drive in

[MsJewel]

That would be fun! :) Julie