Is it Foolish...

     

 

Is it foolish to think

he should think of me?

             

as a pale moon sits idle in the sky

as if to haunt the lonely dream

of a kiss half remembered

 

Should I sing or sigh or cry

as all the pretty pleasures of those days of sweetness vanish

like ashes on the wind

leaving me once again undone

soiled

from a touch forever fading

 

Or shall I wait…grasping at dawn in pink and white linen

as ribbons of hope weave sunbeams

through the daisies in the window box

meticulously stripped of lacy white petals

                              "He loves me, he loves me not…"

now only an echo that really has no place in a lonely dream

 

And when she spreads her hair upon his pillow

is it foolish to think...

                                                            he should think of me?

 

Author's Note

art by Steve Hanks

Reviews

[Diana]

I adore this piece. I think almost anyone can relate to this...

"And when she spreads her hair upon his pillow
is it foolish to think...
he should think of me?"- The sad tones of wistful longing really came through. Probably my favorite piece from you so far...

[MsJewel]

Thank you Diana. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful weekend. :) Julie

[Rosaria_V]

this was beautiful, Julie

[MsJewel]

Thank you Rosaria. :) Julie

[Rosaria_V]

Your so welcome, read my poem when you can, "promise me"

[Rosaria_V]

Please and thank you xoxo

[Anand Sehgal]

stake your claim !
I am with you :) :) :) fun apart , very good write indeed :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my kind friend! :) Julie

[Emerald Seas]

Striking poem, as any woman that has been left wondering has had this question rumbling in her heart and mind for ages after. Softly written, but with a strong undercurrent carrying a strong message. Loved it!

[MsJewel]

Thank you again for your lovely comment. Have a beautiful evening :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

The voice of the poem is imagining, which in turn courts the reader's imagination. When a romance feels this good, you wish it would never end, possibly out of the fear that you'll never rekindle that feeling again. You've crystallized that moment gorgeously here. Well done Julie :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Latifa]

amazing poem i loved it great job romantic in a way that is not cliche

[MsJewel]

Thank you Latifa! :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i don't think it is foolish at all..

his loss...

i really like the hair upon the pillow...don't know whether to sing, sigh or cry...

i like that...there is such yearning in this for what once was.

beautifully written, Julie.

jacob

[MsJewel]

Jacob, Thank you for your very kind comment. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful day. :) Julie

[wordman]

you should always be on his mind and in his dreams

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron. :) Julie

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I have been here before...more times than I care to remember, I think. You have described perfectly, and with beautiful imagery, the inner workings of the "lost lover's" mind. I have often wondered if my past loves think of me, and I have also wondered if my musings are foolish or not...this was very relatable. Beautifully written.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment Sarah. :) Julie

[Leigh]

Um..I don't know if it is or not, but the way you pose the question makes this scenario seem so real and it also it speaks so universally. The fact that we are all blinded by love and our lovers, even when things are coming to an end maybe is so sad, but captured so well here.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Leigh! :) Julie

[h d e rushin]

"is it foolish" since this lovely poem ends and begins with this haunting question, makes it a refrain,
almost musical; and yes I can imaging this as a song, a progressive country song, where the lyrics
are as sumptuous as these and asks similar transcendent questions. (those questions extending beyond the limits
of ordinary 'good-answer' experiences).

I love this poem.
dana

[MsJewel]

Dana, Thank you for your lovely comment. I look forward to reading your poetry! :) Julie