Waiting

Love Poem

 

art ~ Richard Johnson

 

 

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Where dreams upon my pillow gently rest

of flower blooms all dressed in shades of love

I lie as warm as summer’s tender breath

with curtains open to the night above

 

A soft wind blows just like nights before

with memories that have me counting stars

in skies that whisper love forevermore…

longing to hear the night is finally ours

 

When love kneels gently by my side again

and gracefully I’m dancing with the moon

through skies of amethyst and times of when

the morning took this beauty way too soon

 

My heart sings with a voice fading away

like drifting clouds through moonlight’s tenderness

and yet the flower blooms will always stay

where dreams upon my pillow gently rest

~~~

 

 

Reviews

[ShelleyA]

Hi Julie. A very good write about love, the beauty and dream of it. Good imagery, flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Rhyme is good. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Lovely depth of feeling. I love the deeply romantic tone of this piece. Good closing lines. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment Shelley. Have a beautiful day! :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

There are so many cool things about this piece. I love how well-crafted it is...I didn't even notice the rhyme scheme till I read it though. The romanticism you evoke is peaceful, idyllic, gentle...beautiful work my friend :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for reading my poetry and taking the time to leave a comment. I appreciate it very much. Have a wonderful day. :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Same to you my friend :)

[TL Boehm]

memories that have me counting stars. that's lovely.

[MsJewel]

Thank you! Have a lovely weekend! :) Julie

[Latifa]

oh you got me dreaming with this one girl awesome really captivating

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you! :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

While this one is poignant, there is an acceptance of what is coupled with a warm remembrance of what once was. So lovely, Julie. The rhyming flows easily and the images are just beautiful. Wonderful poetry. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you for supporting my poetry Lydi. I appreciate you! :) Julie

[Jack...]

Julie, love is so much more beautiful when it flows from your hand. I always seem to feel a certain peace when I read your work. Like I have been transported to another time and place, where nothing at all can harm me. Loved this entire poem but this one verse took my breath away.


"When love kneels gently by my side again
and gracefully I’m dancing with the moon
through skies of amethyst and times of when
the morning took this beauty way too soon"

[MsJewel]

I always look forward to your reviews Jack. Thank you for supporting my little love scribbles. I appreciate you! :) Julie

[Dr. Wood ?]

well that's set me up for the day in a very relaxed mood...Thanks Julie

[MsJewel]

You are welcome. Thank you! :) Julie

[Pryde Foltz]

Another very beautiful piece, Julie. You are a breath of fresh air.

[MsJewel]

You are very kind Pryde. Thank you! :) Julie

[adreamer]

It is everything someone feels when they are in love with someone it was painted so beautifully this one. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

"Where dreams upon my pillow gently rest", Oh, this is a lovely and soothing poem. Well done!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for reading and leaving a lovely comment. I look forward to reading your poetry :) Julie