Here Kitty Kitty

not my usual sweet little love scribble....

 

 

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Gracefully he moves with the stealth of a cat

slipping unnoticed through the shadowy night

The cold chill of sweat runs down his neck

glistening under the street lamps light

 

His palms are moist with anticipation

as he waits for his innocent prey

His senses keenly aware of the present

for tonight he will have his play

 

As the moon up above reaches its peak

he sniffs the air appreciating the scent

of a whisper of jasmine floating in the dark

erasing any thoughts of repent

 

He sneers, leaning back…yes right on time

her pink scarf bright against the muted light

the click of her heels on the cold pavement

his sweet victim of the night

 

Her head held high in confidence

golden hair twisting in the chill of the wind

but her eyes dart quickly through the ominous streets

conflicting the message she sends

 

Fear…he can smell it…and jasmine perfume

as she quickens her lovely pace

But it’s too late…he is upon her now

terror lines her tender face

 

“Excuse me miss, do you have a light?”

he pulls a cigarette from behind his right ear

She catches her breath and steadies herself

but her eyes are still filled with fear

 

“No I don’t smoke” she softly replies

Oh my…such a pity

As her silhouette fades into the night

he purrs…here kitty, kitty

 

Maybe tonight wasn’t his night

but tomorrow when the moon is high

he will follow the scent of jasmine perfume

tomorrow…he won’t let her walk by….

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Reviews

[N. Tripper]

I don't usually read poetry because I don't write it, but your drew me in with that fantastic title! I thought this was well written and you are very talented. You have a gentle style of psychological horror going on here and I would like to read a story of yours if you have one.

[MsJewel]

I've only written one story - an erotic little tale with my friend Trace - he is on this site as well. All of my writing is poetry. This one was a little out of my comfort zone, as I usually write romance and love poems, but it is based on a personal experience. I have Part 2 and 3 but need to do some editing before I post. Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Here Kitty Kitty'
MsJewel,
From a place of mystery you place the reader in the dark street and we are aware of a presence. This mind, this presence is seen in this world and many of us have had or seen things like this and you have woven it well. I was relieved at the end when your lady was able to walk away.
Blessings
Kathy

[ferousfinite]

I like that you are scripting this piece out in your head as you are writing this as if it were happening and you see it as you write it. A good first draft.

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[wordman]

maybe tomorrow night she will be prepared with a can of mace lol
you really did a great job on your description of a scum bag
Ron

[MsJewel]

LOL. Great idea Ron! :) Julie

[Me]

Very chilling...love it! :) x

[MsJewel]

Thank you Raven! :) Julie

[Keith LaFountaine]

This is a very dark piece filled with, what seems like, playful prose. But your imagery, oh man. Everything from the offering of the cigarette to the final line are constructed in such a way that I fear the person's mind we are in. Excellent work. As a writer who makes most of his work from dark, gritty ideas I can say that you've captured an air of menace while deftly hiding it behind a playful covering.

[MsJewel]

Thank you so much Keith. Your comment means a lot to me coming from such an exceptional writer of dark pieces. :) Julie

[TL Boehm]

Now this - this is what I would call true horror at its finest - because you've couched it in rhyme the impact isn't as "quick" - this one settles on you. Like watching a spider sink fangs into a fragile wispy lacewing....it is when the reader stops and lets the words descent from the air to the gut - there is the recoil. Yeah. this thing packs a whollop. Well done.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much. Dark writes are a little out of my comfort zone. I appreciate your very kind comment. :) Julie

[Tom]

As you say yourself not your normal genre of poetry though I must say this was every bit as good, a real thriller that captivates from beginning to end!

Will there be a part 2 ? Hope so !

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Tom. There is a part 2 - coming up. :) Julie

[Tom]

Splendid !

[redzone]

my first thoughts as i saw the pictured eyes and the first few lines was "stalker" poem and as I read further, I wanted to shout "RUN" Julie, "RUN" don't be a victim. I have a baseball bat that you are welcome to use anytime. if this is based on personal or a friends experience, these monsters do not usually give up so please be careful. as for the poem itself, there should be more such poems written. yours was well done and evoked the horror this experience means for women. it gave me the strong desire to use that baseball bat myself against such ugliness. be well Julie,from a redzone who is working to put an end to all this madness. thanks for a courageous poem. ---redzone

[MsJewel]

Don't be a victim. Four words that it took me two years to learn. You are so right. We cannot be victims. I wrote a series of three poems about this experience. It has helped me put it in perspective and the fear is now gone. Thank you for your heartfelt review. :) Julie