A Vision of Beauty

a love poem written in an envelope form

photograph ~ skiwasser65

 

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Oh beautiful you, I’m yours and you're mine

You sing in my soul the warmest refrain

and send my heartbeat much like drops of rain

dancing to your song again and again

and this tenderness, I find divine

 

And that is why love, I feel we are one

You’ve captured me now and I long to stay

mesmerized by you as the disarray

of storms of passion so deep within play

in loves harmony, untamed and undone

 

Oh beautiful you, what am I to do?

You’re only a dream, if the truth be told

and when I awake and raindrops turn cold

I wish for the night to stay and to hold

these visions so warm of beautiful you

~~~

Author's Note

The envelope form is metered poetry with stanzas of 5 lines and a rhyme pattern of abbba

Reviews

[Jack...]

Julie, I swera, your world must be filled with beautiful love, for your offerings always shower us with this wonderful affection. I love the format of this piece, though I was so lost in your words that I could not really see past the loveliness to find the rhyme scheme until I read your author's note. Once I went back and read it again, it became even more beautiful. Very nicely done.

[MsJewel]

Jack, Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful day! :) Julie

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'A Vision of '
MsJewel,
This was a floating cloud of imagination where the heart is free to fly. It was like a place of rejuvenation and giving oneself the right of choosing to imagine. Our imagination is where we can pick what we want. Life is not like that so much of the time. Your romantic poem was inspiring for sure!
Bless you.
Kathy

[Tom]

Sometimes dreams do come true !

Delightful and enchanting as always !

[J. J. Nightingale]

I never use form .. so I hadn't heard of "envelope" ..

Untamed and undone .. kinda says it all .. .. wow

I guess some have this kind of relationship ..
I had Love, tenderness .. and joy ..
Nothing untamed ..lol ..

A beautiful fantasy ........ Jazz

[MsJewel]

Love, tenderness and joy sounds wonderful to me! Thank you Jazz! Hugs, Julie

[J. J. Nightingale]

You r welcome Julie :)...............

[Mark Heathcote]

This is a very romantic poem nicely written, good job.

[S C]

Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for stopping by and leaving a lovely comment. I look forward to reading your poetry. :) Julie

[TL Boehm]

Such a sweet poem and technically brilliant. So often when a poet is fettered by mechanical constraints there is stumbling but this one just flows.

[MsJewel]

Thank you. I enjoy writing in form, but they take so much time...life just gets in the way of writing! :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. The flow of thoughts were hopeful and I like the description in each line. We need sweet dreams to keep us hopeful. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you again my friend. :) Julie

[Dara]

"Oh beautiful you" what a sweet form of endearment. I just love it and the rest of this beautiful poem. As always, simply stunning, Julie.

[MsJewel]

Thank you so much Dara. It's always lovely to see you. :) Julie

[Trace]

You are a true poetry master when it comes to form. not only do you rock the form, your poem is absolutely beautiful. One of your best. Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very sweet comment Trace. Hugs, Julie