You of Me and Me of You

I’ve been crawling under doormats,
thinking they were blankets.
You’ve been walking into houses,
thinking they were homes.
I was crawling into your heart,
thinking it was my own.
You were walking out of my mind,
thinking it was yours.
We were living in reflections,
so impossibly the same.
We were living in reflections,
You of me and me of you 
(and we both know we hate ourselves.)
You of me and me of you,

I’m looking into mirrors so strikingly vivid;

(I'll hate you for everything I am.)
Mimed movements across lines of latitude and longitude,
mimed movements across shards of you and shards of me--

You're looking into mirrors coated in frost-bitten elliptical patterns;

(You'll hate me for everything I'm not.)
We can’t help ourselves,
we were made for this.
This will be the one thing we do right.

Reviews

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I'll hate you for everything I am. You'll hate me for everything I'm not.

I don't believe I've ever heard those two phrases before. They ring so true. Perhaps you've solved what desire is with these statements.

One thing I respect in a writer is his or her ability to articulately convey pain. You're more than successful at this.

[Hello, Goodbye]

Nice thinking flow..

[Celeste21]

This tugs and pulls. It's written simply but is full of depth. I love the line about you crawling into his heart and him walking out of your mind.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Tear provoking emotion, pure skill with the pen, grammatically sound, breaks in laces but the raw imagery more that keeps you reading, well done.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

wow...This one really got to me.
Touching work. You poured your heart into this one.
Brilliant!

[Sri Gawn Tu Fahr]

I love the vision in the blindness...

[Seshat Nidaba]

I found this hypnotic and yet very haunting. Yay for emotional impact!

[Robin]

very interesting and poetic look at the dynamics of a relationship , excellent ending .