Snakes without reflections (Ignorant arrogance at best)

I shed my skin from the night before:

I shed my sin from the night before,

and swallow it whole,

to never forget.

Slithering around in this secretive fashion,

there is no right or wrong,

only right to left,

right to left.

You're right, what's left?

You've left, what's right?

Our loneliness won’t keep us warm at night"
“I loved you once, 
I loved you so.” I cry out to my starless ceiling.
“I loved you too,
I loved you so.” You cry out in another city,
under another sky
with the same lack of light.
Our loneliness won’t keep us warm at night,
but you and I are cold-blooded creatures"
and we laugh at thinking

we'd need anyone but ourselves.

Ignorant arrogance at best:

we thought we had all the answers.

Ignorant arrogance at best--

I woke up this morning, and didn't know myself.

My mind pounded in melodies of

aluminum and glass,

my stomach turned in it's own acid.

You're right, what's left?

You've left what's right?

The mirrors, they lie!

That isn't my face.

The mirrors, they lie!
These aren’t my lines;
It’s the voice in my head,
it’s the ghost in my soul--

The mirrors, they lie!
I am made up of empty words,
and a cardboard cutout smile,

with disposable skin and undeniable sin:

only you can see me for who I really am.

We slither left to right

in our lonely beds,

and we shiver left to right

within our reptile hearts--

"I loved you once,

I loved you so!"

I loved you so,

I love(d)

you.

Author's Note

In desperate need of constructive criticism, I realize it jumps all around the place, and is fairly pointless right now. I'm not sure where to take it, or how to develop it...these were just the words that came out.

Reviews

[darkgurl]

I really like this it's powerful as well as deep. Quite the profound read. I Like how you started this out. I like the part of the cutout smile. Wonderful write!