Poor Little Girl

Poor little girl has been threw so much

Too much for a girl her age

Abused, raped, heartbroken, and more

how can she live with that on her mind?

how can she tell anyone if she trusts no one?

if she did, what would they think?

who care, they don't know

so many emotions at one time

how can she live with that on her mind?

Reviews

[KatiePie]

"how can she tell anyone if she trusts no one?" was my favorite line.
Editing:
Line 1: 'Poor little girl has been threw (>through) so much.'
Line 7: 'Who care (>cares), they wouldn't know.'
Content:
This whole piece has a beautiful flow and the emotions jump right off the page, it's obvious you know how to use your pen and that fact captures the readers eye, once reading this I really didn't want to stop. Gorgeous piece! Thank you for sharing.
-Cathrine

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

Too much for anyone. It's a pity people who would do such things exist...

I'd suggest the who care to be who cares or who would care; someone else pointed out threw should be through.

Other than those grammatical suggestions I don't see a way of improving this poem.
Well written, sad poetry....

[SamBug]

This was good. The only thing I saw was threw at the beginning should be through. :) Anyways, its sad that little girls go through this every day. It's a sad topic.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

this is very good reminds me of myself sadly but i very enjoyed this very much incredible

[Angelphires]

Very interesting. Think the pic is cute!

[SimplyDisastrous]

Short, touching, very true piece. Though there were a few spelling errors and stuff like that, it was still an enjoyable read.

[TeenRomance2]

Short, to the point, and very sad. It gives me a different perspective in life. Maybe I should quit complaining so much today!

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

Short and surreal. A beautiful piece written from the heart as far as I can tell. Great work Julia.

[Nova]

A short poem with a very strong appeal. I could practically see the girl trapped in her turmoil.

[HighBrowCulture]

terrible... i cant lie... i read too much eliot, pound, and neruda to pour sugar on trash... btw wrong 'threw'