Scattered Thoughts

Dark wanderings of the mind...

deep inside the folds of a brain gone awry
lies the myriad broken answers as to why
one should abide by boundaries given
lest one step into territory unshriven
motes of darkness sparks of flame
leaving no one without blame
burnt offerings brought to the fore
useless meanings given by the score
to mindless chatter building tension
unable to voice a word of intention

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

This ia about a sick mind--but not your mind, serene lady. Still, it is expert poetic testimony.
Unbelievably comprehensive for so few words--and somewhat frightening.

[emmajoy]

A sweep of thought from start to finish. almost a condemnation of self. You kept the meter going on an even keel, rarely missing a note yet stuck to your sadness, or rather, the sad meandering.

[Audrey Howitt]

Liked this poem a bunch! The scattering of thought in middle age perhaps?

[unknown]

These are quite the scattered thoughts, i have many often and have to organize how I will express them. Nice poem Judy!

[Gypsie]

This is excellent, I think we have all "been there". I could really feel this piece as it moved along.

[Lily Mae]

This is an amazing piece Judy... we all sometimes get caught up in "unable to voce a word of intention"...in doing so I wonder what we often let pass us by.. xx Well penned emotions..xx

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Judy, this is outstanding my friend.

[fargone]

this is quite powerful, judy. i think most of us can relate to it....i know i do. both rhythm and imagery are superb. great write, my friend.