Flies

A short story about flies.

Flies.
Two flies are walking up the sidewalk to their shared rotten tomato apartment.
"We got a lot done today Jerry" said frank.
"Yeah we did Frank and tomorrow we'll do it all again" replied Jerry.
"Yeaaah," sighed Frank, "goodnight Jerry, see ya tomorrow!"
"Goodnight, see ya." Jerry waved at Frank and walked inside.
Both flies cuddled up in their beds and fall fast sleep.
Next morning.
Two dead flies.

Author's Note

Grammars bad. Tell me what you think about the story though.

Reviews

[Ioanna Engarhos]

First off, this isn't like something I have ever read! (that's a good thing) I love the simple dialogue. It's nothing fancy, and the shirt sentences are to the point and entertaining at the same time. I would love to have maybe a bit more details, but that's just me. Really well done :)

[avant security guard]

pretty funny

liked it, especially the comment "we got a lot done today"

use that voice
the voice of a character is a gift

[Dan Pretzer]

What a twist ending! I love it!