Appreciated

Forget our memories, Forget our possibilities
Forget the future that you see

It's over now and time to move on
It's been over for a while and time for a true bond

A new foundation built on sacrifice and trust
I'm moving forward and shaking off the rust

Wipe me clean from your memory, forget we had a possibility
Let go of the future that only YOU see

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

I enjoyed the flow of this piece. Sometimes when you remove the word "that", you will find you even get a smoother flow. Just an idea. I have a problem of placing the word "that" oftentimes in my writing, and when I started to experiment with removing this word when it isn't necessary - the poem seemed to flow better.

In line 4, re-spell built and it's perfect : )

I like the main idea of this poem. You show much strength in your words here, the moving on, the turning of the page - and the power to tell another to do the same. Very admirable! Well written, my new friend!

Harsh, but sometimes it just has to be said.
I'm starting to grow more fond of your writing style.

[Jacqueline Lopez]

Wow! I want to marry you!

[Laura E. Aranda]

OUCH
This one stung so bad
I guess from being the one who ended 'it' always
it is harsh to hear the 'end' from a guy's point of view!
WOW
Cheers,lea

[Poetic Injustice]

Typos ignored (as I'm prone) ... well thought and penned. Sentiment recognized.