Wild Child

Wild Child

Wild Child

Not even Seventeen

Wild Child

Can you make Sixteen?

Party and drink

Keep it up and you won’t live to make Fifteen

Stop and think

You’re supposed to play at Fourteen

Used to go to school

Left before you turned Thirteen

What happened with little Bobby at the pool?

When you were a Preteen?

 

Wild Child

Bobby did something bad

Wild Child

Mother dead…where was your dad?

They kicked you out of school

A week before you turned Thirteen

Because they saw the baby drool

Thought about death, stopped with pills in your hand

Three days after you turned Fourteen

That year it was hard for you to stand

After all you just turned Fourteen

 

Baby cries…

You party all night long

This is your life at Fifteen

Smoke fills the air, cocaine in your nose

By now your baby just hit three and you passed out on the floor..

A dying teen

Sick…Bleeding

You’re barely alive at Sixteen

Four year old watches…mommy hardly eating

Skin and bones, the drug eating you from the inside out 

Three months after you turned sixteen

Life left your broken body

A day before you turned Seventeen

Guess who has your baby…her father Bobby

 

Wild Child

Didn’t make it to Seventeen

Wild Child

Died at Sixteen

Reviews

[Perfect Mistake]

Wow this is simply amazing! This made me think and every word to every line is very vivid. Loved the story that was told in each stanza. This gives an out look on teenagers these day, doing whatever they please with no consequences. Great job on this :3

[Bridget Mcmaken]

So sad. This is a well written poem. Wonderful job! I love this poem, so much put into words and well put.

[Layla J Omorose]

thank you

[Eagle Cruagh]

Vivid, terribly intense, literally
rubbing our nose in the sickness
of our society.
The construction of this poem is
unbelievable. It is likeing watching
the "wild child " deteriorate before
'our eyes.
Explosive, terrible, high drama.

Thank you ,
---- JOhn

[Melobldnfr]

Oh my. How sad. Well expressed. Very well expressed, so well as to bring tears to my eyes. Very sad indeed. Jarring good solid write.

[Maan]

I'm literally having goose bumps after reading this, to feel about that fact or thought or idea or observation is really difficult to buy at once. The fact is really appreciating that you haven't put anything related to fantasy in this. You justified the title and idea through out, you kept it accurate, steady and end it by shooting the bullet right in the middle of the board. Good Work..

[Southern Cross]

I could hear the voice screaming through this piece. An amazing write in content, flow and form

[BlackRose]

Awesome Poem. Love how you used the words, seemingly so effortlessly. Catches the reader to keep reading more.

[Alicia Beavis]

Powerful story you've told through your words. You accurately portrayed the life of some people! It's such a shame things are this way. Nicely done.

[Michael X]

wow, the orginality and concept is expressed at its highest intention,
the natural flow of the writing is the art, the words are transporting
and the lesson is defining, brilliantly done.

[Laura Maidah]

It's almost flawless. Try "...the drugs eating you" not, "the drug eating...". It's more credible. Pacing has no issues for me. Meter is iffy. Consonance is great.

[Aehr]

Very nicely written, I like the description. Thee message is really nice and the title in awesome!