From the Tree to the Leaf

From the Tree to the Leaf

When the sun shined bright
We were the perfect pair
When the wind blew with all its might
It was you that protected me with perfect care

The birds played happily in our hair
We built their extravagant nest
Their children were ours to bare
While they played and rest

We have sheltered and protected
Them with our reaching shadow
Under us no creature was neglected
There where we live in the open meadow

It was there in that wide open space
That the wind blew, you would sway
Back and forth with a lovers pace
What a terrible price I had to pay

As the days grew short and the nights long and cold
I was there to watch as you grew old

No longer did you sway back and forth
But turned dead and brittle
While I still stretched tall towards the North
One who used to speak so much  now spoke too little

Now here I am alone and bitter
To my feet I had watched you fall
Footsteps trampled and scattered you like litter
The hands of time would no longer answer my call

The chill of the wind now beat
Against my bare arms
No longer did I have your heat
Nor your charm...

But soon the winds will turn
New buds will begin to bloom
The scent of new life will burn
No longer will these dark clouds loom

Reviews

[☯]

Wow, such a beautiful poem. When I read this, I loved the steady beat, and the calm structure of it. The plot was also very calming and lovely. The way you sequenced each season of the tree was also different, and your feelings that were written also put in more of a gentle push. Very beautiful and stunning. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Great, excellent job :)

[Michael X]

To mark the return of appearance; grandeur set to fade in it's season,
like a secret owned by the nature, above others, like a knowledge shared
between the trees of a forest, the imagery of this poem is magical and
imparts a classic poetic gloom, overcoming. beautifully invented work ^_^

[Ladysue]

This has such a soft heartfelt tone...extremely poetic and so beautiful to read...oh and thank you for your review...

[SpokenWord]

This makes me think of my Grand Father and that special times I had with him while he was here with us. You do like the dark clouds over head :) Very poetic this one is, a story told with poetic versus and description so subtle like a light breeze in the spring.

[Luna Northstar]

This piece was absolutely memorizing... It was so tragic, yet calm and lovely... I adored it.
"t was you that protected me with perfect care"
My only note is on this line. It left me confused for a moment. Thinking a leaf could protect a tree didn't seem to fit. Possibly changing it to "I would protect you with perfect care." Or "I'd hold onto with perfect care." may sound better. It's just a suggestion though =)

"That the wind blew, you would sway
Back and forth with a lovers pace
What a terrible price I had to pay

As the days grew short and the nights long and cold
I was there to watch as you grew old"

I loved this lines, and they honestly brought tears to my eyes. Poetry has also been a love of mine, because I like to depicter the meanings. Now, of course, this could be intended as a poem about a tree and a leaf, but somehow this has an eerie and tragic feel. As if the tree and leaf are truly lovers. Like a husband and wife growing old together, companions. Working together, raising children, and staying with each other in their darkest hours. As the tree watches the leaf grow old and die, a great sadness comes. But one day in the future they will be reunited.

The ending was happy, like a small sense of hope...

This poem was absolutely beautiful; tragic yet, somehow uplifting. Great job.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

and the sun will return again. A beautiful writing!

[disconnectedspirit]

maybe they kept them private amongst ashes and tears..

[disconnectedspirit]

No longer did I have your heat Nor your charm...did they tell you that? or keep it buried from further pain? maybe reflect on that a bit deeper if this is a reality posting..