Shattered

Shattered

 

I have become shattered,

The pieces of my fragile mind scattered,

Blown away by the gusting winds,

Fractured by all of my sins,

There are these darkened voices,

They have guided all of my choices,

Up until this point,

All I had tried to do was not disappoint,

I have become shattered,

The whole of my soul is broken and tattered,

Lost in the dark depths of the ocean,

Where hard waves are crafted from dejected emotions,

I have gone crazy,

The pieces no longer fitting together,

The line between my mind’s fantasy and reality have become hazy,

Yet the need to have your love is a tie I cannot sever,

I am shattered,

And the pieces of my frail mind scattered,

Carried away by gusting winds,

That have been fractured by all of my sins.

Author's Note

I toyed with rhyming in this poem. I don't rhyme often but i like this one

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Minds can scatter on the frail winds of sin. Those dejected emotions can be fitting or not in our inner desires...Excellent...

[Shep]

Even though i seldom read poetry anymore. I thought i would take a moment to read yours. For three reasons . One to find your soul, two because we are or were long time friends. And three to get your attention that i mighy find you once more on my pages.

I love the emotions and the realzim y giivou bring, that make me ponder my soul.

[Magdelena]

Now THIS I do so like!!! The images were right on.. I saw so much of myself within them, and that is saying much! I especially love your way of portraying this.. In everyone's life there comes a point where they may reach these lines..

100 on the Rhyming.. I also do freestyle, mostly my thing.. But sometimes...... You get the picture. Always love stepping out of the box so to speak.

~Mags~

[Layla J Omorose]

Thank you. I always appreciate your reviews because they are honest and cause me to go back and see where i need to improve on. Thank you for your review.

[Magdelena]

You're very welcome. Adore your work...
xo

[MOON]

Love the poem and the rhyme good!

[Layla J Omorose]

thank you

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When something in our life goes wrong everything tends to feel out of place.
Nice rhyming sceme.

[Daydreamer54]

I love it! Its very lyrical and it flows well! Great write. :-)

[Layla J Omorose]

thank you

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

excellent rhymes..a beautiful piece.

[Layla J Omorose]

thank you Neva.