A beautiful tale

A beautiful tale

I want to tear my skin open and rip it to shreds

Pull every last strand of hair out of my head

Hopefully my thoughts will be attached, painfully torn with my saneness

Forever to be misled by my loosely screws cranium

I must be crazy, I must have a liquidated brain

There must be a code to crack these strangling chains

A key amongst my deepest fear, my beloved sweet dear

A whisper in my eat, I faintly hear

"Demise is soon to rise, I can feel it, it's near"

Yellow to black as everything begins to die

Everything structuring him inside topples at the blink of an eye

Ever so subtle as he simply lies

A passionate roar at the sound of his cries

One grasp at a time, his hands clenched with razor sharp rubble

He relentlessly crawls but continues to stumble

Down he goes again as the gravel slices his throat

The queen herself did not defeat his troubles

Only he himself destroyed what could have been fabled

An imaginary note drifts out of his mouth

His most intensive feelings escaping the terror as they're beginning to float

To the stars, to the moon

To the cosmos, to our very own Neptune

Nobody will know his true feelings

Not even he himself could reach them

Reviews

[Captain Rilen]

I liked the pace of your writing. The rhymes are also very well blended and thought out. Overall a fantastic piece, though it could use some more polish.

[bubblefet]

its like incredible hulk going into a fight whoops but then talks and knocks himself out there was another view i had but i liked this view i got from it tnx and nice work