Long Road to Portland

I came in with the sunshine

Drove out in the pouring rain

It's been a long long road to see your face

But still longer going home

A kiss that was eight years in the making

Though it grew sweeter with time

Still I'm back here on this train again

Tryin to get you off my mind

And it's a long road to Portland

Where that Spanish angel lives

And though I will see her again some day

For now, I will mend my broken dreams

You know I'm tired, run-down, and confused

And a little bit ashamed

It's hard to see what's up ahead

When you're staring at your past

And it's a long road to Portland

Where that Spanish angel lives

And though I will see her again some day

For now, I will mend my broken dreams

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[Glen Yumang Manese]

I came in with the sunshine
Drove out in the pouring rain
It's been a long long road to see your face
But still longer going home

A kiss that was eight years in the making
Grew no sweeter with time
Now I'm back here on this train again
Tryin to get you off my mind

And it's a long road to Portland
Where that Spanish angel lives
And though I will see her again some day
For now, I will mend my broken dreams

You know I'm tired, run-down, and confused
And a little bit ashamed
It's hard to see what's up ahead
When you're staring at your past

And it's a long road to Portland
Where that Spanish angel lives
And though I will see her again some day
For now, I will mend my broken dreams

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And it's a long road to Portland
Where that Spanish angel lives
And though I will see her again some day
For now, I will mend my broken dreams

I came in with the sunshine
Drove out in the pouring rain
It's been a long long road to see your face
But still longer going home
A kiss that was eight years in the making
Grew no sweeter with time
Now I'm back here on this train again
Trying to get you off my mind

And it's a long road to Portland
Where that Spanish angel lives
And though I will see her again some day
For now, I will mend my broken dreams

You know I'm tired, run-down, confused
And a little bit ashamed
It's hard to see what's up ahead
When you're staring at your past
Nothing last forever
Never a day goes by
Lying is one thing, but denial is another
But there’s hope and I keep going farther

And it's a long road to Portland
Where that Spanish angel lives
And though I will see her again some day
For now, I will mend my broken dreams

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I put the hook line in the beginning...and added the 8 lines per measure instead of the 4 lines...Also added 4 lines in the 2nd measure...and again put the hook...you can change the words...I inserted what I felt would go in line with the song...it's just a bit of a change and the order of things...but I like it...but again...its your work..and hope you have success in putting it to music...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Did you want this to be more a lyrical verse...than a poem...with your hook...put in there:

And it's a long road to Portland
Where that Spanish angel lives
And though I will see her again some day
For now, I will mend my broken dreams

at the start with the first stanza:

I came in with the sunshine
Drove out in the pouring rain
It's been a long long road to see your face
But still longer going home

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I can see and hear this as a song...the cue in the third line give that clue:

It's been a long long road to see your face...

but I could be wrong...and your intent was just a poem...but if so --- I'd have at this again --- and give it all its worth...

[Alex Borst]

Hi Glen,

Thanks for your comment. Yes, these are song lyrics. I have already written the music for this, but have not yet recorded it. The song is folky, maybe with a slight touch of country (only a touch :) ).

When you say " I'd have at this again --- and give it all its worth..." are you thinking it could use some revision? If you have some critique to offer, I would definitely appreciate it.

Thanks,
Alex

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You're welcome...I read so many...since this one...but I will look over it and give you my two cents worth...standby...get back to you...