If only you knew

This is a love poem, it describes all the things my love makes me feel.

If you only knew you
.
.
are Extraordinary
You are Never secondary
You are As fine as the blonde hairs that illuminate that glare as the sun beams flow through its strands.
You are gold, that is to precious to ever let get sold, actually let me Rephrase that.
You are a gem.you deserve more praise. Lovely crystal's rest in your center while your exterior get over looked, but not by me.
To me You are a ever growing light that lays trapped between two temples, bringing that gorgeous color to those wide eyes.
To me you are my everything, all of my stars in the skies, my universe.
To me you are the ever so fine line that ties together love with passion.
To me you are my dopamine, you are pretty dope I mean. I'm not high on life I'm high on you. High on the way you look at me. High on the way you touch me. High on the way you love me.
To me you are an ever growing safe of memories. Growing from short to long term. Taking my every last first and my first lasts.
You are as breathtaking as a gust of warm wind. You know just how to make my heart go for a spine.
You are as gentle and light as the fingers you use to glide and slide your way up and Down from the square of my shoulders to small of my back.
You are the feeling i feel when you look into my eyes and say three incredible words that seems to bring me back from the dead every time they are said.
You are never secondary
You are Extraordinary
If only you knew
.
.
how much i loved you.

Author's Note

Boyfriend has a lot insecurities an I wrote this in hope to put his mind at ease.

Reviews

[Chris]

"to precious" - too?
"over looked" - one word?
"are a ever" - are an ever?

There are soooo many "you are"s in a row - vocally it would be stronger to have a "you're" or two to further emphasize the first "you are" and so on throughout. Perhaps a fel line spaces just before the "To me"s - to separate and more value those thoughts.

at the very end..."loved" is pretty past tense for the Author's Note you left.

Vocally I'ld like to hear this with your rhythm, tone, and timing. Gestures and body language emphasizing.

[Jocelyn cortes]

Thank you for youre input. Got to fix some things it looks like

[Chris]

Change is ALWAYS up to the Poet - not a reviewer. Spoken Word has its own priorities and poet's their styles

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Very poetic so many vivid imagine ery. It's great journey over words and emotions. With very nice positive meaning.nicely done.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

This beautiful poem should do it! Great word-play, imagery, rhythm, flow and emotion- "You are my dopamine, you are pretty dope I mean"- love that line!. Truly "Extraordinary"!

[MysteriousAries]

I like all your wordplay on this... on how you describe, how someone matters... nice work...

[Jocelyn cortes]

Thank you 🙂

[Angel]

Well, then. That was simply wonderful, so pretty and personal. I hope he knows now because that was really great.

[Jocelyn cortes]

Thank you, and if he doesn't know now I don't know what will make it click

[Angel]

Something he has to figure out on his own? I hope it all works out