The King of Nothing

So i have rewritten this trilogy, time and again. I have finally completed the first book of the series--well, changes will always be made--and this was the prologue. I have posted this once before, but due to what a reviewer has told me--for which i am very grateful--i have completely changed the prologue. So please, i really appreciate advice, as i wish to someday publish my books. Critics on grammer, thoughts on characters, theories on plot. Any advice--i love it! Also let me know if you want to read more. Like i said, i have completed the entire first book, The King of Nothing, and could continue adding more chapters. So let me know!