Quiet, Quiet, Quiet

Somewhat intense...

Quiet, quiet, quiet

I must be quiet

Not a whimper or a moan or a scream

Quiet consumes me

Quiet keeps me alive

Deadly expressions of pain

I am ever so careful to keep them contained

I do not rage or thrash or seek escape

Even God I hate and curse in silence

It is time for me to go away

Quiet, quiet, quiet

I am deafeningly silent

Not even creating the whisper of tear on cheek

The flow of blood exploding from my nose

Commands the attention of his wrath

How dare I bleed

The embers of his ire glow like fractured crystals in his eyes

Well placed blows explode into rainbows

I do not gasp or sigh

I hate my skin for betraying me with the thunderous echo it lets loose upon impact

Quiet, quiet, quiet

Like Mama, who never does cry

Though I hear the tearing of her skin as she slips the needle in

I hold my breath so as not to betray my pain

A new burst of fire rages into my belly

I bite my lips to stifle the scream

A pathetic whimper escapes anyway

Now his fists find purpose

More noise in the collision of boot and bones

Now look at what I’ve made him do

I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry

I cannot stop the desperate stream of pleading

I’m sorry, I’m sorry, I’m sorry

The silence that would save me eludes

My breath betrays in ragged gasps

Like a worn out tornado the storm blows away gone

I drag myself to the darkest corner and rock

Quiet, quiet, quiet

In deafening silence I admire the pool of blood

Collecting in the fold of my shirt

I am quiet

I am strong

Rocking and bleeding

Practicing strong silence

Reviews

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

WOW! This is a raw and amazing poem! I love the raw emotion that takes us to the very moment of pain, as if we are beside...or even inside the one cradling in the corner inverting themself to find the strength and hidden power to survive in the required silence of wrath. Perfect and amazing! Just WOW WOW WOW!

[JourneyBlu]

You are too kind. I was a bit worried when I posted this that it was too dark and intense and that maybe it was too personal for others to relate to. I am so relieved that you could feel the tone of the piece. Thanks so much for your insight!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Never worry if something is to raw, dark or off. We have many facets to ourselves...some we try to turn a blind eye to. You have a gift that allows one to face them in a most poetic way!

[Violetta Alexis]

You truly do have a way with words. I congratulate your excellence.

[Karen Preston]

Very powerful!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Powerful, extremely powerful. I found myself feeling the pain of your character. Well done...you are quite the story writer.

[JourneyBlu]

Thanks for the feedback, it is always most appriciated!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Its hard to practice a strong silence when presented with such an emotive poem.

[JourneyBlu]

Bless you and thank you!

[zainul]

Amazed by the power of silence.
Quoting your verse appears the best option for me to adore the beauty of the awesome piece:
"Quiet, quiet, quiet

In deafening silence I admire the pool of blood

Collecting in the fold of my shirt

I am quiet

I am strong

Rocking and bleeding

Practicing strong silence"

[JourneyBlu]

Thank you so much for your kind words! I am so glad that this pieces is being well-received!

[zainul]

You are always welcome.
It deserves more reception.
Just wait and see how others review this piece.

[Sami Khalil]

Bravo on a nice poem with a lot of intensity...

[JourneyBlu]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

Quite welcome...