Mystical Sea

It is written in the Shakespearean Sonnet, My very first Sonnet, and written about the sea...

The mystical secrets under the sea,

enclosed by the magical cloak of reflection.

Can only be unlocked my a mystery key,

and that key holds the answers to all of our questions.

 

Myth after myth the sea forever reeps,

sowed by the sailors after every return.

Those mighty big ships the sea forever keeps,

broken hearted families who for their fathers so yearn.

 

Violent and stormy for eternity it remains,

the priceless treasures stolen forever.

Every ship swallowed, in it's belly it decays,

histories riches blown away like a feather.

 

Majestic and mighty the sea will always be,

mysteries and secrets never to be redeemed. 

Author's Note

I was so excited with this amazing site, that after i posted all my poems, i just sat down and wrote this one as fast as i could. I've always loved the sea, and i do scuba diving, so i wrote my first poem on the sea.

Reviews

[Lexi Nicole]

Very, very nice for a first sonnet. The imagery is fantastic, the flow is nice and even, and the word choice is great. You painted a wonderful picture with just a few words. Great write!

-Howl

[Ebs]

awesome poem.


Ebs

[~IlOvEcHrIsToPhErBuRnEt..]

this is your first poem? dang, you must have always been a natural at poetry......i like this one alot...its so good

[Servant Ties]

I loved it!! I love to ocean too! only I'm too afriad to actually get in the water lol >.< two thumbs way in the sky !!!!!!

[S.J.Floreen]

I love the sea as well, but could not have possibly described it as you have in this poem. It's wonderfully done showing the sea is both beautiful and deadly.

[Poeticpiers]

A valiant attempt Themed well but always a but with me I assume you want honest critique
Iambic pantameter the usual meter for shakespearean sonnets is five metri feet or 10syllables to theline You miss out on this in places
You employ slant or half rhymes which is acceptable bu you can usually find a full rhyme if you try.

It gives me pleasure to poets attempting to write formally Kepp writing but read some of the classic poets

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A lovely writing. Thank you for sharing. Debileah