Escape

I want to escape your song,

It is too hard to listen to

not mellifluous 

It hits the ear wrong

I want to escape your painting

I'ts a watercolor

mocking me

Did it mean to be degrading

I want to escape your book

Where every sentence has a hook

every chapter

Makes me want to do nothing but look

Reviews

[KWP]

hey this is great ... I like it in each stanza that stands alone, offers unique images then moves onto the next. Your words are very easily relatable and I am certain that everyone who reads will swim in their own interpretations with ease. I like this because the intention is to escape without getting all whiny and melodramatic .. just stating the facts and wishes that the muses asks of himself and yet struggles with ..

Nice one my friend xx

[Peyton]

Thank you KWP I'm glad people seem to really be liking this one :)

[Confuser]

Thought very good, great metaphors and a wonderful take on the clique of love, which is always a clique in itself I suppose; the angry frustrated tone, but it is as if "fine" I'm done, I'm gone, thus the escape. Great writing.

[Traci]

Memories always call us back to cherished times, even when songs, paintings, books, etc are attached to heartache and pain. With each we find strength and understanding. Well done, Peyton.

[Peyton]

Thanks i appreciate it :)

[Brianna Brie]

The first two verses make it clear of the desired escape obviously because of the pain this person inflicts. The last verse speaks of the push and pull. When a person knows full well that this relationship is not good, but finds themselves right back there to be tortured some more. Nice job!

[Peyton]

Thank you for this beautiful review :)

[Tara Togoland]

I've run out of words to review your write ups, they are always so outstanding and I loooove it loooove it and did I mention?.....loooove it!

[Peyton]

It means so much to me :)

[Kenaz]

In the third to last line you forgot your "Y" on every.

The words in the first stanza really resonate with me for some reason. You craft your words together quite well. As I read this I am easily able to draw my own meaning from the poem; the universality is enjoyable. Nice work

-K

[Peyton]

Nice catch! I am glad you enjoyed it :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Escaping...that implicates entrapment, a prison of some kind. Prison as a punishment can be rightful, but If a man or woman is innocent and is locked in, it's one duty to escape, to try to escape. No man or animal must endure this state of being. In my opinion you've described it very well in your poem.

[Peyton]

Thank you for your kind review :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

My pleasure.

[Rene Salinas]

There are certain memories that reach a ate of superflous. They come and go then every s often we remember them or something triggers the callback. There are other which are subject to places, smeels , again their fleeting nature is one that would invoke when needed. There are some however that are encrusted to our life and they relate to our growth which makes them dangerous. In this writing we have an account of a human being but described in life imprints and how the damaging nature of them makes the object want to repel. In terms of relationships however every experience counts towards the next.

Hopefully the next will be more auspicious.

Thankyou

[Peyton]

Oh wow that just made my day, thank you so very much Rene :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the analogies used here...and that song thing....god, yes, memories of her that haunt like a song we can't stand, but we keep humming over and over in our head or out loud.

can't stop doing it...can't put that book down either, even though we know it is a story that is no good for us...and the colors in the painting have all run down the painting like tears on a cheek.

[Peyton]

Thank you so much Jacob, your support means a lot :)