Ghosts in the sand

Ghosts in the sand

A Poem by Josh Heighton
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A poem about our fallen men and in the eyes of the "enemy"

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Bullets fly by
Jet plane's soaring through out the sky
An explosion overhead illuminated the air around
The ground shook as I hit the dirt and grim with a pound

Never before driven by aggression
Just thinking that this will just be another therapy session
Up and back on my feet I take fire
Although harming someone is no desire

Flashes of smoke and metal flare out of my barrel
The bullets pepper dirt,rock,steal even loose apparel
With a loud pop one bullet struck flesh and bone,blood
A trickle of a crimson dark liquid began to flood

As I take a look through my scope,angered,nervous, and high
A bullet rips through air, striking my chest will I die
As I fall and dream of greater strives
Thoughts fill my mind, if only I had more lives

Will I get my promise, my wish, my prayer
Or just go down as a Canadian slayer
The area surrounding on fire and beginning to roast
No I will not be remembered and become another ghost



 

© 2013 Josh Heighton


Author's Note

Josh Heighton
first poem,ignore any grammar please

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Grammar can easily become inconsequential under poetic license and there are only very minor errors here - none of which detract, distract, or confuse i.e. the meaning is evident.

You've done a very good job of describing the emotions and sensations that this soldier is feeling; the way you've set the scene is also very good, lending itself to vivid imagery in the mind. If this is your first poem I can only urge you to keep going.


I have only one more thing to add in response to the final line:

At the going down of the sun
and in the morning
we will remember them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Josh Heighton

10 Years Ago

Its been a while since I have wrote anything. I guess I needed comments like this to get me back int.. read more



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Grammar can easily become inconsequential under poetic license and there are only very minor errors here - none of which detract, distract, or confuse i.e. the meaning is evident.

You've done a very good job of describing the emotions and sensations that this soldier is feeling; the way you've set the scene is also very good, lending itself to vivid imagery in the mind. If this is your first poem I can only urge you to keep going.


I have only one more thing to add in response to the final line:

At the going down of the sun
and in the morning
we will remember them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Josh Heighton

10 Years Ago

Its been a while since I have wrote anything. I guess I needed comments like this to get me back int.. read more

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Added on May 7, 2013
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Tags: war, death, bullet, battle

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Josh Heighton
Josh Heighton

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