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A Poem by Josh121
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Something i wrote a long time ago

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What was once happiness,

is now sadness,

when one can no longer go to bed,

because of a clouded head filled with dread,

when a longingness for life,

is no longer rife,

when one looses sight of the light,

have no fright.

I'll be there to make it bright,

I'll be the one to make things all right.

© 2012 Josh121


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Josh121
this waas written a long, long, long time ago.

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This was really good. I really enjoyed it. But I must admit, the rhyming there at the end came on a bit too strong. Like, there were five rhyming words almost in a row, kind of disturbs the flow of the otherwise gently flowing poem. Anyway, great job. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


nice, i like it a lot .. always good to think there is someone to help you in the darkest of times

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on February 16, 2012
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Josh121
Josh121

Fingal, Tasmania, Australia



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Hi, My name is josh. I am 16 years old. I live in a small town in Tasmania,Australia. I love reading and writing. I have written a few short stories and entered in one contest but mainly I woul.. more..

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