Should've stayed asleep

Should've stayed asleep

A Poem by Joe Palmer
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There's always tomorrow

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Should've stayed asleep

Sometimes it's hard to find structure
In the unrelenting chaos of life.
You've got to surface for air,
But these moments are rare,
A brief bit of respite would be nice. 

Often it's hard to find reason
In this frantic yet mundane routine.
But you vehemently deny,
To just lay down and die,
As surely the better times have yet to be seen?

Lately you've succumbed to the pressure
Comforts breached and mind overwrought.
Tired and obsolete,
Just commit to defeat, 
Or recede to the dark of your thoughts.

No-one ever said this was easy
Or suggested the hurdles of life were not steep.
But do not despair, 
If you're not already there, 
You probably should just stay asleep.  


 

© 2013 Joe Palmer


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Often it's hard to find reason

In this frantic yet mundane routine.

A brilliant ode to the regular and habitual routine of life. I think sometimes everyone wakes with this questioning of 'when does it get better?' I love the word choice as well, very relatable. I empathize with you my friend. A good, solid piece. xx.

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Ah, but when you roll over that same problem is there. In line 5 of stanza one did you mean "respite" rather than "rest-bite". Nicely written piece my new friend. Your friend in words, Pete

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Joe Palmer

11 Years Ago

After a brief consultation with Google and the grammar Queen (my mother) you are right. I always tho.. read more
Facing life , facing our demons , facing defeat , facing the routines and so forth. Everyone has their own approaches ...A splendid read and write...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I can so relate. Some days it is easier to stay in bed than to face the world. I liked the rhyming couplets in the center of your stanzas. Very effective. Good write. Lydi**

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Joe Palmer
Joe Palmer

Aberdeen, Scotland , United Kingdom



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