Should've stayed asleep

There's always tomorrow

Should've stayed asleep

Sometimes it's hard to find structure

In the unrelenting chaos of life.

You've got to surface for air,

But these moments are rare,

A brief bit of respite would be nice. 

Often it's hard to find reason

In this frantic yet mundane routine.

But you vehemently deny,

To just lay down and die,

As surely the better times have yet to be seen?

Lately you've succumbed to the pressure

Comforts breached and mind overwrought.

Tired and obsolete,

Just commit to defeat, 

Or recede to the dark of your thoughts.

No-one ever said this was easy

Or suggested the hurdles of life were not steep.

But do not despair, 

If you're not already there, 

You probably should just stay asleep.  

 

Reviews

[M. Stein]

Often it's hard to find reason

In this frantic yet mundane routine.

A brilliant ode to the regular and habitual routine of life. I think sometimes everyone wakes with this questioning of 'when does it get better?' I love the word choice as well, very relatable. I empathize with you my friend. A good, solid piece. xx.

[Barbara Walker]

I love this! So true of how it can feel. Great write.

[Angel]

Yeah... I (yawn) really like (yawn) this piece. It is pure.....(eyes closing)....genius....



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[Tiffany Boles]

Wow. Them words are so true. I love that flow of the rhythm, it's awesome! I wish I could only sleep instead of walking into the problems that creep. Job well done, it's wonderful.

[Joe Palmer]

Thank you very much. Although going back to bed doesn't seem like the most helpful advice I could give for dealing with life's problems.. x

[Tiffany Boles]

Well it sure is a relaxing start.

[emilyfulken]

wow!!! you write well. this. poem is amazing. thank you for sharing.

[Joe Palmer]

Gracias! thank you very much my dear x

[Great Aunt Astri]

Lovely poetry. But you are young, you have all your life before you to leap over those steep 'hurdles of life'!

[Joe Palmer]

yes I agree! I'm trying to make the transition from eternal pessimist to optimist, believe me! Thanks for your kind words!

[smurfett]

I love this! I felt so much hope yet despair. Almost as if one should succumb to all their grief and pain in this life, but yet a glimmer of hope and promise of a new day. Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing

[Joe Palmer]

Thanks again! Yeah I wanted it to be initially a poem of hope and over-coming the day-to-day s**t. But then I realized that it's often easier said than done!

[smurfett]

I agree my friend...keep writing...love your work

[Joe Palmer]

Thank you. I will get round to looking at your work too! As soon as I've dealt with muddy-dogs and whatnot. !

[Hatchling]

This is just amazing! Keep up the great work

[Joe Palmer]

Merci beacoup! x

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Those somber days make me feel like crawling back to bed... to stay in dreamland until another day comes...
Sometimes we need to give in to the pull and just indulge in the sea of comfort.

A Lovely flow of words here... Nicely penned, Joe.~xoxo~:)

[Joe Palmer]

Thank you very much! Don't worry, I don't have such a bleak outlook on life all the time! Xx