Envy

I do all I can, I do all I must

And yet I remain unrewarded, unvalued

Those around receive what I work for

I have no sense of entitlement, I am a victim of theft

I am robbed of the life I strive for

I am robbed of the life I've earned

No career, no love

No value, no reward

Social media is my curse, my page of darkness

Rubbing in the wounds of my loss

Envy is the grief of what is stolen

Envy is the darkness of the glory of others

Reviews

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I can definitely empathize with this piece; me being 28 and single and still working toward a degree, working serving jobs and barely getting by while Facebook constantly reminds me on where my peers are and where I, myself, should be. Sucks. However, it's good to know that I'm not the only one. Anywho, onto the review.

As said before, it is quite relatable. Everyone is envious to some degree, especially when perusing social media and seeing the selective highlights of other people's lives. My advice is merely grammar or sentence structure, diction or phrasing.

The line,
"And yet I remain unrewarded, unvalued"
rhythmically would sound better as,
"And yet I remain unrewarded, undervalued"
but I do get why you chose "unvalued." I'm just positing an idea is all.

The line,
"I have no sense of entitlement, I am a victim of theft,"
I'd remove "of theft" because it becomes a redundancy once you read the following lines where you state twice, "I am robbed..."

Actually, while on that those lines, an idea, maybe rephrase it to "I have been robbed..." might sound a little better, phonetically.

Lastly, those last four lines are great but feel just a little bit off in terms of rhythm. Maybe a little tweaking by subtraction or rearrangement. I'd say something like,

"Social media is my curse,
pages of darkness
rubbing in my wounds.
I envy what is stolen.
Envious in my darkness
I envy others' glories"

That's just a quick thing, but you get the idea. I love those last four lines, the words you chose and the sentiments inside them but I think you can do SO much more with them.

Anywho, those are just some ideas for a little workshop. You really do have something here. Thanks for sharing! Keep writing!