Gold

a little sad, depressing piece I wrote one night... enjoy

I never treated you right
We never seemed to get along
We argued about everything
Even our favorite song.

So when we went
our seperate ways
I though I'd freed myself
from a disgrace
But now I know
I was wrong all along
But I can explain it now,
Though for that my heart
Cries out and longs.

Its so sad that this is what it takes
For us to be reconciled again
If there'd been any better ways
for us to make our amends
we should have taken them
because now I feel
Is it possible?
I feel sorrow.
And it's real.

But now it's been ended
by the ground
The glory of flight has ceased
the sky above
a crimson red
a sunset, an ending, red
like the ground beneath my feet.

I hold you here,
as they stare,
I cry a single tear.
This is what,
More than my death,
I always have silently feared.

It's all over, the casket's been shut
and lowered into the ground
Death's done what no woman could:
My emotions, buried within me, it's found.

So I scream
at un uncaring sunset
twelve years have lapsed.
So it seems
My mind won't let go
of that which has come to pass.

I fall to my knees
my mind flashes back again
I'm in a graveyard no longer.
But on an open glen
We're so happy
Together
Forever
But it will all soon come to an end.
In a flight
From a window
Your screams so shrill,
So thin.

That moment haunts me
every night
I wake in a cold sweat
When in my mind's eye
I can see
Where you and the ground met.

He kissed your face with his stone cold lips
I ran screaming to save you
But I was too late,
Once again too late,
you lay dying in pain, you,
your mouth tried to move
to form three little words
but no air could it find
So without a sound
you left this world,
left me sobbing behind.

Your head falls back
you lie so limp
its all happening again
In my shaking hold
Your blood, my tears
fall to the ground, mingled
Each drop more precious than Gold.

Reviews

[Natalie]

Wow, this is an eerie, dark kind of poem. To tell the truth, I liked the ending far better than the beginning. The verses towards the end just seemed more deep, while at the beginning it fell kind of flat for me. (I'm just trying to be totally honest here, no offense intended) And also I just caught a small grammatical mistake, "let me sobbing behind." That may be some sort of artistic interpretation that I'm just not getting, but I think it would make more sense as, "Left me sobbing behind". That's about it though. I did enjoy it, it was different and unique. n_n

[Tayler]

Wow Joey, you never told me how well you wrote depressing poetry. Ha no but seriously this was my favorite by you. The power is stunning. Kudos my friend

[Joseph Baker]

oops... typo :/ thanks. fixed it.