I really like this a lot. Sometimes I feel like a poem isn't a poem unless it rhymes, which is bull. I like how you weave this. It brings life to the entire thing..and it gives imagery. Whenever anyone smiles at me like the bus driver I have the exact same thoughts. XD
ha Iike this, it's food for thought, why must we always write in rhyme? I personally can't help it now, when I've spent sometime in the writers café I sometimes rhyme when I'm speaking to the kids and have to stop myself and go back to "normal" conversation... good job :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Yeah I think rhyme has its place but I found myself too often trying to force rhyme into my work and.. read moreYeah I think rhyme has its place but I found myself too often trying to force rhyme into my work and it makes the writing clunky sometimes, thanks for the review :)
7 Years Ago
your right there actually, great poetry does not need to rhyme, that's what I love about it - the fr.. read moreyour right there actually, great poetry does not need to rhyme, that's what I love about it - the freedom of the writer to just go with it in what ever style they see fit - :)
I’m a new writer, I enjoy writing short essays, but would love feedback on anything and everything. Don’t be afraid to tear into my work, it will be appreciated more..