You Lose

You're writing with a blood stained quill on this parchment called life.
You can't erase this. The spilled blood has already dried.
Fade to black. You never plead forgiveness. You never cry.
So where do you see youreself in the next five years? You'll be taking another life.

Burn the paper that it's on. Your sins will be remembered.
Take the lives of those who know.
There will still be members of the seeing truth.

She don't know, others don't care.
What's the point anymore?
You can swipe away your tracks and never look back
But victims are always dismembered
Who are you fooling?
No one, no one you'll never have to the end.
At this rate, you'll die alone.

Burn all of the records. All sins will be remembered.
Take the breath from every squeal, you're oh so vicious.
You are so far down, what do you have to lose?
In the end, there will still be those seeking the truth.

In the end you lose.

Reviews

[Jasmarine]

When I read this, all the things I regret doing in my life definately came to mind, especially about the part 'You can'y erase this'. It also reminded me of Billy Talents 'Devil on my Shoulder', a delicate line between 'good' and 'bad'. This piece makes you think and remember to analyze what you're going to do before you do it. Does that make sense? I hope so.

Loved it though, keep up the great work :]

[The Wave]

wow

powerful piece. really liked, "Burn all of the records. All sins will be remembered." Repeating the second part to that really helped in making this a very effective piece as a whole.

overall, very well written. no spelling/grammar errors that I'm aware of and again, very strong piece
good job.