Under The Moon

Just a little short story that I've been working on. I hope you enjoy it.

“What’s wrong”? He said quietly, still placing soft kisses around her neck. “I...I just don’t think I’m ready…” she responded, with her eyes closed, breathing heavily.  It was a cool summer night, and their bodies were locked together, seemingly inseparable. He was on top of her, carefully. So carefully, that his shadow, created by the dim candlelight, probably weighed more than he did.  “But, babe….we’ve been waiting for this for almost 8 months…” he stopped kissing her, and firmly tangled his fingers with hers, staring deep past her body, staring straight into her soul. “I know, I know..” She continued, “But…I’m just scared…this is all new to me, what if we mess up?” He then moved closer to her, placing one soft, eternal kiss upon her breath taking lips, and muttered “Well…if we’re going to mess up, lets mess up, together.” She laughed quietly to herself and whispered “Are you sure about this?” He inched closer to her face, lifting up her chin with the tip of his index finger, staring into her eyes. “I’ve never been so sure in my life, darling. Just trust me..” He said, laying her down on the bed, with his hand behind her head. As the air became crisp, and the animals began to sing there midnight tune, together they spent their night peacefully under the moon.

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[nostal]

Great

[.Bunnie.]

^.^ Aww that's so cute...!! I wish my first time had been with someone as sweet, gentle, and caring.... *drums nails* Oh well.

Anyhow--now that you have WAY TMI about me--the only suggestion I can make is formatting. That's easy, though, and it's so short it'll only take you like 2 seconds. Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing!!