The Biggest Regret of my Life

I fell in love with a friend.

Your love builds a facade of perfection
Your face behind a mask of fallacy
Forcing me to lose my self-direction
Nail in the coffin, heartbreak you can't see

My heart has moved on, but my mind stays bound
My thoughts drowning in a sea of regret
In a garden of thorns, your rose was found
Memories of you, I'd rather forget

The name I once loved, now fills me with dread
I felt I could say all, but now I'm mute
My heart won by words better left unsaid
I learned your rose had thorns left at its root

At one time, I could have said "I love you"
Yet now, I can't stand anything you do

Author's Note

How can I improve

Reviews

[yona]

It's beautiful. I'm an amateur so I can't say too many constructive things. Perhaps the use of the thorn/rose analogy in two places can be improved? Again, I think it's beautiful :)

[Joodan]

Thanks a ton. Don't sweat it, I'm an amateur as well

[B]

Love turning bad
like sour milk
can not be ingested
its like poison

well done .... very expressive

[Joodan]

Thanks man