Drowning in a Mask

Drowning in a Mask

A Chapter by Not A Writer
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An awesome song declaring hopeless by the lack of help. How can I do it by myself?

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Hey!

I don’t know what to say.

Hey!

Do you think I’m okay?

Hey!

What do you think of me?

This life isn’t how it’s supposed to be.

 

Life masked,

Rainbow colors darkened.

Waves rollin, I’m under the sea.

Life masked,

Fiction world liven.

I’ll be out when you pull out your hand.

 

When you give a hand,

When you smile to me,

When you give a hand,

When you smile to me,

I’ll be there to stand!

 

Ohhhh (8x)

 

When you pull out your hand

When you take the time to know me!

When you pull out your hand

I will stop drowning under the sea!

Please wash my face

Come help me to see

Caze I’m broken!

Unable!

Without you.

Without you.

I’m broken

Without you.

 

Ohhhhh (3x)

Will you save me?

Will you save me?

 



© 2010 Not A Writer


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i would want to hear the tune to this. your a song writer 2. i love writing songs. maybe before to long i can show them to someone. Secretly im waiting until i become famous being a model and maybe i can sing on the side. im learning to play the guitar 2. im excited. o but this was a good poem. sorry if i get side tracted. i am known for just speaking what comes to me after i read a poem. hope you dont mind.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice song lyrics.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like it a lot! It would sound really good to music! I like your word choice!
Did you ever record it?

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really good! I love how you put everything together and it seemed like a really good song

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really good! One of my favorites of yours I think. I really liked the message. People don't often realize that they have the power to help others so tremendously. "When you give a hand / When you smile at me / I'll be there to stand" That really sums it up! I loved that part.

I could definitely see this going to music. It seems like it would have a really catchy and meaningful feel to it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I agree with Sarah Marie, it was well written too. Keep it up! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


cool. it has a special meaning to it and is very catchy

Posted 14 Years Ago


It's a touching song that is already stuck in my head. Nice.

Posted 14 Years Ago


really nice work. Well done

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice work it has alot of emtion for it to be a song nice job.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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