Where is Perfection's Door?

A poem that aptly describes my poems wanting to be read or improved. I want to be a good writer but don't know how to.

Attempting to type a Shakespeare

Or be noticed in the darkness

Is making a wish upon a star.

 

Documents clog my computer

With poetry prized by all,

But then there’s mine.

 

I would change how the world thinks,

Perhaps, bring the world another tune

And show the world the flavors I drink.

 

I’m in a furry by reading tips on

Assonance, rhyme, alliteration, and imagination

For I believe poetry is more than a yawn.

 

With my mind BOOMING

And my mind containing blocks,

Am I capable of a Mona Lisa?

 

Have I put you in my shoes?

Are my shoes comfortable or not?

What do you think of this piece?

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Constructive criticism will be gladly accepted; please comment and tell me what you think of this poem.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

I find the fonts to be very appropriate with your message. There is no level of perfection for a poet: but as a poet, there is certain guidelines that we must experiment with to improve our capabilities as writer. I don't think -any- writer should ever get to a point where they see themselves as an elitist, neither do I think -any- writer should have the gull to say they are a better writer to another. To the latter, I say this, to what degree?

Wonderfully penned in fine writing, the poem conveys a living aspiration to each writer. A very wonderful depth perception along with rhythm and rhyme to help season the poem. There is different times of poetry, as there are with artists... there is those who think inside the box, those who find the corners of the box, and those who work outside the box. Each should respect one another, even if a writing is original. But we should always leave places where one can excel.

Keep it up! 9.6/10.

As a friend and a writer,
S. W. Scaggs

"For I believe poetry is more than a yawn."
that's my favorite line- very creative and original.

hm, to be a "good writer",
good spelling and good grammar makes a good writer, I suppose,
but then after that, I think it's just a matter of personal preference.
like music, like photography, and art.
just don't over-think it, and don't force it.
Those are just the writing rules I personally live by.

[Livana Lowell]

I notice you kind of flip between rhyme sequences like you have stanza 2, 5, and 6, unless you meant to do that. See, I consider this more of a personal poem, so I don't like giving critism to something like this.

My thought falls along the lines of what Eric Cox and S.W. Scaggs have said. I mean every writer strives for excellence, just have an idea of where that excellence is supposed to lie. Shakesphere had his own style in his time, and still progressed as a genuis in the writing world. Keep, writing, I say.

When a poem generates a mood within a reader and obtains a memorable status, then I think that makes a great poem. You do that a lot, so that's all I have to say.

[Eric Cox]

There are so many variations in writing style and tastes out there, some may think someone elses writing perfect or great and others not.
This is a very creative and interesting write.

[SamBug]

I did like this. It was interesting and the change of fonts really helped with things and made it more...what's the word....constructive and good. It was creative and interesting. Great write!

[The Analog Kid]

Creative way to express an artist's frustration. The only way to improve is to take risks and not worry about it. Just like anything else. This is a cool idea. Tha's what it is all about!

Pat

[Tina Kline]

I think this is rather nice the way you presented it on the 'page'. It seems to be about searching for your true creative voice, or at least that's what I thought when I read it, and I did several times. It is very creative and I do like it too.