So Feed Us

We're just so lost; so lead us.

We’re just so lost

So lost without a shepherd.

We want,

Want a holy passion for you.

We need

A change coming from who you are

 

So feed us

Feed us your flock, Oh shepherd.

Oh lead us

To where you dwell forever.

For we are, so hungry and weak

We can’t protect ourselves,  Oh shepherd

So keep us,

Protect us in your arms

For no one else is sweeter but you.

 

You’re so glorious to us

Dwell in us Oh spirit.

We want,

To know who you are.

We need,

Your presence so we can stand by your side.

 

So feed us

Feed us your flock, Oh shepherd.

Oh lead us

To where you dwell forever.

For we are, so hungry and weak

We can’t protect ourselves,  Oh shepherd

So keep us,

Protect us in your arms

For no one else is sweeter but you.

 

 

How great thou art

Who can know thy power?

Show us

Thy glory today

Lead us

All into your ways.

 

So feed us

Feed us your flock, Oh shepherd.

Oh lead us

To where you dwell forever.

For we are, so hungry and weak

We can’t protect ourselves,  Oh shepherd

So keep us,

Protect us in your arms

For no one else is sweeter but you.

 

 

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Mr. Paz,

Thank you for your sincerity to God. This poem cries out to He, who deserves all glory, that we need you! Without the hand of the shepherd, we are lost! Such beautiful thoughts when you come down to the fundamentals of what need is referring to in the Bible in the original Koine Greek. It's this point of literally falling to the floor and begging Christ out of a dire necessity. I felt compelled to review this, but I do not believe in the third stanza that the Spirit literally indwells us: as you can see why I believe that in the latter part of my message to you concerning that. He only indwells us through the word of God (i.e. the Bible). That is the only way the Father or the Son can indwell us.

To the actual poem: You do often have a few grammatical errors like places where there should be a comma but there isn't. Though I can understand the repetitive emphasis, it can become redundant to the eye of the reader like in the first lines could just be "I'm lost; so lost without a shepherd!" Though I can understand that it has lyrical views to it, remember that poems become songs not the other way around. A lyricist doesn't add repetitive to reinforce it unless you can just feel it as you sing it. Anyways, other than grammar errors. This poem is good. Really good. The flow is perfect, and when I say perfect, I mean flawless. Each stanza has the perfect rhythm count. Rhyme is always nice to add but not required. An overall good poem that's just a little rough with presentation. Good theme too. n_n Good job. 9.5/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful prayer. We do need help and guidance in a life. A excellent poem.
Coyote