Bullet with no rifle

Rough draft could be better

I've buried the ones I love
I've lost all my friends
I've had everything taken away
I'm starting all over again
loving a girl who wasn't in love is hardest thing I've ever did


like a bullet with no rifle
like a captain with no ship
like a bar without any drunks
like a stripper that doesn't get tipped


My worst day
Is when I heard you say
I don't love you
I've haven't been the same
my attitude changed
my confidence went down the drain
everything is lame
nothing is the same
ever since I heard you say
I don't love you


like a bullet with no rifle
like a captain with no ship
like a bar without any drunks
like a stripper that doesn't get tipped


It made me so sad
I wanted you so bad
but I lost the race
I wanted to touch you're face
I should of made a move but I was too afraid
Too afraid of what you would say
I lost the chance to taste your lips
cause I didn't want you to reject me
I didn't wanna hear you say those words to me
we are just friends


like a bullet with no rifle
like a captain with no ship
like a bar without any drunks
like a stripper that doesn't get tipped

Reviews

[Capaneus]

Not bad, think the chorus works better "like a bar without whiskey " depends how its sung however

[Jones]

That does sound better thanks

[Capaneus]

Well, if you'll let me do that, then how bout this, theme being a thing lacking it's purpose or what makes it whole....

like a bullet with no rifle
like a captain with no ship
like a bar without the whiskey drunks
like a stripper got no tip