Drawing and Poem One

pray for mercy from evil that befalls
inside, escape - destiny is near
candles burn, flickering light
shadows lie in corners swamping space
close vision is all encompassing
of animals in night time,
hounds hatred biting hard
against cold white flesh, mixing colours
grey world where distinctions leave
races greed overcome all sense
contours smoothed around a face
smeared blood over bodies
rememberance of savages, sorry for
what we have all become, too late now
as wax slides down, coagulating with life
all we wanted was to love, now sit
in disintegration faith falls like raindrops red
on hands and knees I wait for the lord
enshrouded in walls of an awaiting horror.

Reviews

[The Tao of Bri]

DAMN!! Now this is dark..the word choices are incredibly haunting and the picture is like the ashes of pompei~ how incredibly well they weave together! I cannot wait to read the next one, but I have to get back to work..soon though! I love the aggressive wording in this...liek Beethovens fifth...POWERFUL BOOMS!

[Dead Angel]

ooooo dark and morbid, and so was the poem. gary you did a great job at capturing what the picture was saying with your words and natalie, well you just have a knack for drawing. the both of you work very well and this piece shows it. well done to you both :)

[Fantasyfairy]

A nice dark poem, perfect for the drawing that it was written for.It smacks you in the face demanding to be heard, incredible writing. XX

[Alex Walters]

I keep getting an image of a man saying this as a chant, getting louder and louder as he reaches the end of the poem. Very powerful choice of words and an excellent piece altogether.

[R J Askew]

'Hounds hatred biting hard' is the the strongest line in this for me...followed by the wax reference. I think of the four images 2 and 4 are the strongest

[Nick Erickson]

Natalie with the inspiration and Gary with the words - even when it's the other way around, it's always a great read.

The poem fit the drawing excellently, bringing depth to both.

Well done.

[These Haunted Hallways]

I agree with Bri here as well. Absolutely loved it!! I like the sinister feeling to it; as the imagery depicts the poem's surrounding walls that come crashing down on top of everything, and hell now reigns a new world order hehe. Great imagery, and an awesome drawing!

B.A.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I think the first line would be better as "pray for mercy from" instead of "pray with mercy for evil..." it sounds as if you are praying for the evil and want to have mercy on the evil...that cant be so though. think about it.