Let the Truth Remain Unspoken

another short poem, dont usually write 'em short so enjoy this one, haha

Let the truth remain unspoken,

So dreams may still be dreamt.

Let the heart remain unbroken,

So first loves may be kept.

Let the stars remain above us.

So we may always strive.

And let death remain among us,

So we may know our lives.

Let all these things be done in turn,

And they, in turn, will do;

Everything that need be done,

To give, your life, to you.

Author's Note

the usual drill, but if you read it, and your reading this, and your a member, please review and tell me your thoughts even if they are bad

i do want to hear the truth despite what the first line of this poem says, hahaha

Reviews

[Bud]

Had to laugh at the contradictions in your word comparison. LOL Too funny. First, great to see you posting again, my friend. Second, exciting seeing you post again, my friend. Third, this is one Outstanding work of art, as usual and as to be expected of you. Your pen never fails you. You have the precision of a Mastery. Never stop. As far as reviewers, lately we seem to have the FB 2.0 bug going around since the makeover. A lot of fly by reads these days. LOL
This is a Remarkable piece. You are what I call a natural poet who knows exactly what he is after in each piece, and builds with a Mason's accuracy.

[faryn wolff]

Your sincerity resonates throughout the poem from carefully crafted words. It was a pleasure to read this work of art.

[Void Unspoken]

okay... here's the absolute truth... i completely loved this poem! i wasn't sure what to expect at first but after i read it... i couldn't help but read it over and over and over. i kept thinking about it. this is absolutely amazing! im so glad i read it and i cant wait to read more of your literary works. im impressed! great job!!!!

[loowzerX]

your first piece of work that i've read.....excellent.

[Lorame]

So simple, but each line holds such meaning. It has a very nice rhythm to it too. Very very nice.

[Sasha]

This is a gorgeous poem. I love the message it sends - especially "Let the heart remain unbroken". The bit about stars is a close second. It's not at all pretentious but really sensible and beautiful. Great job. :)

[aedaba]

I really like this no lie, its hard to explain why though its just like so i feel like the the words well idk but this poem really does speak to me. Yeah i know this probably isn't very consructive haha sorry

[Lilly]

Such a lovely poem. I love the rhythm of this piece, its simplicity and its beauty. This is so well written too.

[J.P. Bristow]

I am one of those people that doesn't believe age has anything to do with experience-but this speaks with wisdom and the structure and flow well thought out. I am looking forward to reading more from you.

Well written.

[Gheeneil]

Wow, i loved the simplicity of this poem. This speaks so much wisdom. Great write.

[Cassidy Mask]

Wow. This is a beautiful poem. You certainly have a way with words :)