Can You Keep A Secret ?????

A secret recipe to wealth!

Can You Keep A Secret.



The Modus Operandi of the Alchemists of Old.

Is a secret I will tell you, SWEAR IN BLOOD it won't be told!

The way to riches you will master, I will take you on the path.

Turning lead into gold, you will be master of the craft.

O heed to me, my apprentice I will tell you only once!

The Universal method, the arcane way, to wealth enhanced

The seven wandering stars, that are naked to the eye.

The different stages of the metal, the varied colours of the dye.


Saturn's heavy lead, to Mercury, Quicksilver you become.

Tin's metamorphosis miracle, from God Jupiter's heart plum.

Trusty Iron, loves vision Venus, red copper to the core.

Shining silver moon, with weighty gravity you war.

The five elements congeal, the Zodiacal process of the Sun's.

The Philosophers Stone lies before you, the secrets almost won!


The Unicorns pure crimson blood, transmuted in Phoenix flame.

Mixed with a Ravens claw and a flowing noble lions mane.

More colours than a peacocks feather, burst into clear blue sky.

The mixture is quite potent now, let not the cauldron fires die.

Now plunge your heart into the brew, if ever you be so bold.

Wait for the kiss of Fortuna's Luck, Gold!.....Gold!!.....GOLD!!!

Author's Note

I leave my esteemed reviewers to interpret this one :)

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Very very very very very very very very very very VERY amazing!!!! Valde prodigious!!!! Muy impresionante!!! 很惊人!!!! Zeer verbazingwekkend!!!! Très étonnant!!!!! An-iontach!!!!! Ajabu Sana!!!! rhyfeddol iawn!!!!

Man, I hope I didn't just cuss in a foreign language. That'd be super duper embarrassing :P

I just couldn't find a way to say how very very amazing this is using only English!! And it's all your fault. Shame on you for being such a spectacular writer that I'm left wordless for a few moments after I read one of your poems. Eternal shame.....

I really really love how you described all the different metals in the second stanza. It was beautiful in a metallic way; it all fit together flawlessly. And then in the last part where you actually gave the recipe ...awesome. I'm so jealous of how easily you're able to rhyme! It's not fair! Grrrrrr >:( I honestly feel like throwing a gigantic muffin at you right now, that's how angry I am. Sadly, my shrink says I've gotta start keeping my anger in check and blah blah blah....

ANYWAYS!!!!!

Way to go on this one! You always write such incredible things that I've never really given much thought to and then I read your poems and I'm like "Holy cow!!!! This is so interesting!!! Why haven't I heard more about this??!!! Why isn't there a whole class being taught just on this subject??!!! Why do I only have ten toes???? What's wrong with our scholastic system these days!!!????"

By the way, I completely agree with lothlorienwriter....QUITE BEING SO ANNOYINGLY GREAT AT WRITING!!!!! Do the impossible for once and write something so horrible that everyone dies...and do it fast because I've got a Chemistry test on Thursday that I'd rather not take.

Meanwhile, I'll be in my kitchen, baking a giant muffin. Mwahahahah ;)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I accept the horrible poem challenge......your have it before thursday.

[Becca Bishop]

YAYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm gonna hold you to that :P

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/JohnHutchinson/1059867/

[Muse]

ha ha ha...I studied this a few months back...wrote one myself titled the Philosopher's Stone. It would be easy to get lost and wrapped up in your metaphors....but because I'm familiar with it already; the message is so simple. We all seek this magic...the sweat elixir of life. The art of alchemy may be forgotten..but it is not lost. Thank you for breathing new life into it...I loved it.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Is your Philosophers Stone on here?

[Muse]

I'll find it...link you.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/hideNseek/970582/

[lothlorienwriter]

JOHN! Your a very ANNOYING poet it must be said! I keep thinking its about time you churned out a crap poem but again I will have to wait till next time.
You are an Alchemist with words and again this is a deep metaphysical piece which can be enjoyed by the novice and adored by the pro's. More colours than a peacocks feathers indeed! You little sod! LOL

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Am not sure whether to say thanks......or to use modern parlance "Do one!". ;)

[lothlorienwriter]

Ha!Ha! Gotta love the John....... Mr J.P.H :)

[gombeggar]

i'd like some gold, please

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I bet you do! :)

[gombeggar]

yer very much in the way of right, lad