The Diabolical Death Of Sylvanie.

A witch is killed in my first novel, Arise the Stone Witches.




The Diabolical Death Of Sylvanie.


Her beauty flamed in divine fire

burning, yearning in my minds eye.
Her symmetry, her shapeliness,
spun the spell of Apollonian myth.

In allurements trap, I floundered.
 Venal vice, she held me ensnared.
 In intimacy with this devilish nymphet,
this malevolent spirit of darkness, I joined.

 My demise, her mindset in orgasmic throws.
To be slaughtered in a bed of diabolical deceit.
Her purpose was known to me but driven
 from my mind by passions entrapment.

Her long cascading locks, entwined round my
neck as if they had an evil will of their own.
A feminine tress, a noose of golden flow.
Strangulating the very life out of me.

The pain, the torment of imminent death
broke the hold of passions spell.
I grapple and grasp with my free hand,
for under my pillow laid the witch's bane.

Cold hard heavy hilt of blackest onyx,
 with bright white crystal luminescent blade.
 A lightening blow bolts to evils eye!
The dagger overwhelms her brain.

To you or me an instant death, life hangs on to this foe.
Held strong by murderous carnal embrace.
We fight in lascivious blows of orgiastic legend.
I draw the blade out, a pitched hideous scream!

I stab her in frozen heart, still she lives on.
Many times now, in a frantic frenzy I strike.
The b***h starts to burn slowly, smoking at first.
I escape her coitus clamp and golden noose.

Hells conflagration now before me stood.
Fire burning, raging from orifices bright,
A dragon incarnate, screaming flames.
Crying tears of black acid down blistering cheeks.

She implodes into a nothingness, a black hole,
Before exploding in an all consuming ash.
I choke on her cinders but embrace her embers in victory.
The death of a Witch........... Slyvanie.

Author's Note

A stand alone poem......but intended for a story line in my book Arise the Stone Witches. (Chapter 5).
Might do another poem at some point as Slyvanie has a twin sister who will be out for revenge.............

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i think i like this more than any other of your writes to date. i'm not going to write a long, drawn out dissertation because there are those lurking behind the larger minds who have precious little to do other than attack what they don't understand. this is an informal site for artists who share creative and informal forum about each others art, and, knowing that you are in fact gifted i will not malinger over the details at present. in short, this is a great poem!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

My thanks Q :)I love Writers Cafe x

[quinfinn]

how can we not? you are welcome, poet!

[Ahmad Cox]

I agree though. A persons critique shouldn't be to criticize someones poems on small details or because they don't understand the poem or don't like the flow or the way it is written. As the old saying goes if you don't have sommething nice to say than don't say anything at all.

[Arielle Ann]

a fantastic means of setting the outline for your story-line. I loved the sensual elements in all their eerie yet beautiful style, which made them more appealing. love and lust are always more delicious when they have the "dangerous" factor :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

You cant beat a bit of "danger factor" when it comes to lust :)

[PublishingAgent]

Behave John! lol ;)

[Arielle Ann]

right sir ;)

[Raven Starhawk]

Truly a treasure. The title itself was the reason why I clicked but your words in the body of this poem are gems.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Raven thank you.Your a treasure too :)

[Ahmad Cox]

I love this one. I think this is possibly one of your best so far. I could actually see the epic battle in my mind. Great write.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Its was epic wasnt it! :) Cheers AC.

[tamsin]

This is truly epic stuff, and very sexy : D

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Am glad I didnt make love to this woman! Would of put me off sex for life.....lol.

[tamsin]

Yea a bit scary lol

[Gretchen Clarke]

Nice way of calling attention to your book. Wish I'd thought of that. XD
Keep up the great work!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks am writing poems that are going into the chapters to add a little something extra.

[James William Dyer]

I like the fantastical / sexual elements. I enjoyed reading it. In my opinion (and opinions are like a**holes), the biggest, most literary-sounding words are not always the best. Sometimes a common, everyday word is called for, depending on its level of descriptive ability or if the word actually sounds like the thing being described. In some of your poems I feel like your searching for the bigger more advanced literary wordfs, but that may work best in fantasy poetry. Again, just an opinion and only you really know what works best in your poetry.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I see what your saving and in my other poetry I tend to leave the big words behind......but in my metaphysical mythical fantasy poems I think they work. I value your review and opinion greatly as your one of the best poets on WC. Thanks.

[deepblue04]

wow, i love the pic that goes with it. and the poem is just simply amazing!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Susan :) Which of your poems is your fav........so I know which one to check out?

[deepblue04]

hmm, I would have to read all of the poems before I could tell you :)

[Marie]

Slyvanie was hard to kill wasn't she...deadly beauty...

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes indeed.......she was inspired by a ex red headed girlfriend of

[Ruth]

I loved this and hope you do a sister poem to it like you mentioned...
Brilliantly displayed...heart wrenching in some ways, in others, thrilling but in all...unsettling, brilliant!
xox

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I will do a follow up poem at some point but havent got to that part of the story in my book yet.......its something am thinking about though. Thanks PS :)

[Ruth]

Most welcome :) xox

[Jack Reaper]

unique and descriptive. nice piece. i find myself even more curious about the vengeful twin. cant wait to read more of yourwork

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes sister Zaphara will be out for blood!! Watch this space.