The Diabolical Death Of Sylvanie.

A witch is killed in my first novel, Arise the Stone Witches.




The Diabolical Death Of Sylvanie.


Her beauty flamed in divine fire

burning, yearning in my minds eye.
Her symmetry, her shapeliness,
spun the spell of Apollonian myth.

In allurements trap, I floundered.
 Venal vice, she held me ensnared.
 In intimacy with this devilish nymphet,
this malevolent spirit of darkness, I joined.

 My demise, her mindset in orgasmic throws.
To be slaughtered in a bed of diabolical deceit.
Her purpose was known to me but driven
 from my mind by passions entrapment.

Her long cascading locks, entwined round my
neck as if they had an evil will of their own.
A feminine tress, a noose of golden flow.
Strangulating the very life out of me.

The pain, the torment of imminent death
broke the hold of passions spell.
I grapple and grasp with my free hand,
for under my pillow laid the witch's bane.

Cold hard heavy hilt of blackest onyx,
 with bright white crystal luminescent blade.
 A lightening blow bolts to evils eye!
The dagger overwhelms her brain.

To you or me an instant death, life hangs on to this foe.
Held strong by murderous carnal embrace.
We fight in lascivious blows of orgiastic legend.
I draw the blade out, a pitched hideous scream!

I stab her in frozen heart, still she lives on.
Many times now, in a frantic frenzy I strike.
The b***h starts to burn slowly, smoking at first.
I escape her coitus clamp and golden noose.

Hells conflagration now before me stood.
Fire burning, raging from orifices bright,
A dragon incarnate, screaming flames.
Crying tears of black acid down blistering cheeks.

She implodes into a nothingness, a black hole,
Before exploding in an all consuming ash.
I choke on her cinders but embrace her embers in victory.
The death of a Witch........... Slyvanie.

Author's Note

A stand alone poem......but intended for a story line in my book Arise the Stone Witches. (Chapter 5).
Might do another poem at some point as Slyvanie has a twin sister who will be out for revenge.............

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i think i like this more than any other of your writes to date. i'm not going to write a long, drawn out dissertation because there are those lurking behind the larger minds who have precious little to do other than attack what they don't understand. this is an informal site for artists who share creative and informal forum about each others art, and, knowing that you are in fact gifted i will not malinger over the details at present. in short, this is a great poem!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

My thanks Q :)I love Writers Cafe x

[quinfinn]

how can we not? you are welcome, poet!

[Ahmad Cox]

I agree though. A persons critique shouldn't be to criticize someones poems on small details or because they don't understand the poem or don't like the flow or the way it is written. As the old saying goes if you don't have sommething nice to say than don't say anything at all.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Dark evil temptress! always make a good story line though, get writing!!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I have been her twin sisters a bit of a cow too! :)

[TrimarcoRansome]

Ooooh a good evil plot!!!

[lothlorienwriter]

I got lucky on a first date with a B***H like that once! Only difference I killed her off with 3 bottles of Liebfraumilch before she burst into flames!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Well that's just plain wrong mate and in some countries illegal! :)

[PublishingAgent]

WTF! DIE B***H DIE!!!! This is the most crazy arse poem I have read here on Writers Cafe I love the idea of her hair having a life of its own. A feminine tress, a noose of golden flow. Thats a great line.You certainly know how to mix it up Master John!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Well she deserved to die and die hard for her crimes......in my book she's a nasty piece of work and many men pay the price!

[spiritwind]

Powerful.
Cannot help but continue reading this nightmare of "love" making
Dark but hypnotic

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

my thanks :)

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

erotic and twisted

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

my thanks :)

[Barbara Walker]

Not a common theme for poetry, therefore it already stands out in a crowd. The idea of stabbing and stabbing and still alive, is pretty frightening. What will kill this witch? Your imagery is awesome! great vocabulary!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yeah she was a hard one to kill....I wonder what the fate of her vengeful sister Zaphara will be????

[lothlorienwriter]

John I love this poem and already reviewed a while back I know you are really busy at the moment with the Magical Mythical Mystery Compendium but I wondered if your are near to finishing Chapter 4 on Arise the Stone Witches? Also have you started the Zaphara follow up poem as this one was so good, Id like to see if you can top this! No pressure :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Ha thanks Mark. Yes the Compendium is taking up a lot of time and "Arise" has taken a backseat for now (have started chapter 4)although I should try and give it some more time......have as you see her been writing the odd poem to go with it, not sure about Zaphara poem yet as am reluctant to kill them all off to quick.....am thinking long term sequel to "Arise" LOL :) Am reluctant to kill Jack off as well at the point so this follow up piece might be a while in the making. We shall see....

[Fréyjä Helv..]

This genre is the reason why I enjoy writing poetry. So surreal, dark, sinister, indulging. The narration was powerful and almost impeccable you could really picture the scenes. I write poems similar to the genre, but exert a bit more effort on meter and patterns of rhyming. Others perfect the meter and rhyme patterns, but don't really have that indulging story to display. I wish you would write more poems like this. :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Well eventually I will get round to writing the "Revenge of Zaphara" Sylvanie's twin sister! Am concentrating on putting together The Magical Mythical Mystery Compendium at the moment but watch this space.

[Rob Santana]

What a great write John. You are a very skilled writer.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you I believe my imagination is skilled but I still have some way to go as a Writer. My grammar needs work but am getting there, I only started back at the beginning of August.

[hogan]

Forgot to add the bit that makes us even, distracted by a phone call!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

We are even........for now...... ;)

[hogan]

I am very jealous of your talents, but I do understand and can visualise 10 dimensions of space and time. A powerful burst of erotic emotion.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks Hogan

[hogan]

You are very welcome, fairly new on here but suddenly I have a few people reading my raw work, hope to eventually publish a novel, an epic work, will see.