Magnus Opus Hermeticus

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Magnus Opus Hermeticus

Crystal clear, the waters of life.
Shown to me by angels of grace.
I sing, to the mornings stars.
Lord, my soul cries for you.

Grounded on earth's foundations.
Focused on heavens divine light.
I enter through minds door.
 Immaterial vision awaits me.

A gift from the mercy of God.
I have been born in my mind!
Immortal, I stand before the mirror.
Deathless, till the end of time.

Now for a moment, I ascend.
Floating, through clouds of wisdom.
I bathe in a universal castile.
Cleansed of earthly immorality. 

No desecration within the all above.
No violation, in the celestial hallowed halls.
Here I gaze upon hope, imagination and love.
Framed, bound together in trinity.

Far then on winged feet, I travelled,
Not held by the circle of life.
Till time and space became nothingness.
I sped towards a singular light.

Where I am afforded a brief glimpse.
 A golden cup of pansophic truth.
Burning in enlightenment flame.
Blinded, I am sent back into minds eye.

I awake from the dream glad.
For in the heart of this man.
I have learned of greater mysteries.
For in searching for truth,my soul is stilled.

The eternal flame burns brightly.

Cum Luce Salutem.














 

 

Reviews

[Mia]

You're an incredible writer. Each time I read a new poem of yours, I am amazed at what your mind does with words. And it always seems effortless. Where to from here? The obvious answer seems down but I don't doubt that you will find a way to top this and again leave me in awe.

"For in searching for truth,my soul is stilled."

Seriously! What planet are you from!!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I hope there is more of me to come form me as I only began writing two months ago when I joined here in fact. I have a lot of ideas in my head and my imagination has really grown since writing and my dreams and night have become quite amazing....am lucky in the fact I can remember most of my dreams. Thank you Mia for your very kind words.

[Mia]

You're clearly a natural...two months...that's amazing John! You are very welcome for my honest words.

[Larry Dyson]

send us link for the poem submission again please?

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

http://www.writerscafe.org/groups/The-Magical-Mythical-Mystery-Compendium/8970/

[Leslie Philibert]

I`m glad I looked at this. Like the well constructed verses, the fine use of language and the very serious, impressive theme, the use of Latin. You did very well here.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Leslie. I enjoy metaphysical poems best and if I can give them a mythical theme as well then am in heaven :)

[JGIII]

This poem evokes High Church hymns for me.
A point of confusion for me was the line, "I bathe in a universal castile.
Cleansed of earthly immorality" I wasn't sure what element of Castile, Spain you were trying to draw parallels to here.
What I like: I think your poetry reflects the wide range of influences you draw from, some unconventional but it works for you. I like your use of fresh language, you really squeeze the thesaurus dry which many writers don't do.
What I don't like: The fresh language can become a distraction, I had to Google pansophic and I'm glad I did because I instinctively thought it had something to do with sophistry which would have dramaticaly changed the meaning of that line. This makes the poem not as accessible to a broad readership. Granted that's ok if you don't plan on publishing this for commercial profit and I guess it's not a bad thing to make your reader expand their vocabulary.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

castile is also an oil based aleppo soap originally brought back to Europe from the Levant by crusaders.
I love it when people google an element from one of my poems it adds another dimension to the journey my poem has taken you on :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

As for a high church......well the main elements / theme of the poem comes from the Egyptian book of Thoth.

[lothlorienwriter]

Yes get in there! I googled Castile as I thought it was a soap that had religious connotations. Your right it does add another dimension with for me is not a distraction. It adds depth and when you reread the poem again gravitas. Great Write!!

[Art Sun]

truth...funny how everyone is searching for it, the illusion of religions can be a barrier for the whole world is at some point held within their own beliefs...it is so simple, look within your Soul to find ...truth...nice work John...

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks Art was very happy how this poem turned out....it kind of wrote itself which is normally a good sign you have a good one :)

[Art Sun]

its you my friend...you ...

[Pratik]

Excellent write! Magical! Multitudes of themes bundled in this treasure. It talks about illumination, enlightenment and reaching absolution - a true form of divinity. This is one of your best! Why didn't I read it earlier? Going to my favorites!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes this one is quite a journey :)

[Pencrafter]

Your poem touches on some primary beliefs of the major religions of the world, such as the teaching of an immortal soul. I'm not sure what the principle message is or what kind of statement you're trying to make, other than an ethereal feel. Of course, a dream can be anything.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I was hinting at the hidden truth/knowledge we all possess. Following the light we will find the key to unlock it.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

this is a very deep and meaningful write...inner enlightenment is something which is so hard to express

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Well am getting better at understanding it because of my recent discovery of writing.......so hopefully I will get better at poems as I go along

[PublishingAgent]

I cant wait for you to get better John, I mean this as a compliment as your work is wonderful its like you have been writing all your life...and not the beginner you are!

[S]

A very Brilliant piece...it takes all my attention...

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you :)

[James William Dyer]

I liked your use of imagery.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Cheers James interesting dream this one :)

[khalid]

very nicely written. it makes both mind and soul work..

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Khalid.