Seeking My Sword.

Metaphysical quest to find my sword. A poem John Phoenix Hutchinson (C)2012..

Seeking My Sword

Spirit upon a holy quest,
Tucked firmly inside manly breast.
 Pilgrim burned in experience's fire,
 Escapes slowly, cautiously, deathly  mire

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A secret self, yearns for a weapon of deliverance........



Many sorrowful paths taken, wrong choices.
False messiahs preached with devil tongued voices.
The way was shut because I would not listen.
In emotional toil, lost love, I christen.



At the lowest point a realization.......



There was something mystical hidden inside.
A path to take, far away from ever so evil tide.
A way of knowledge, imagination, a golden hoard.
Stone entrenched before me a metaphysical sword.



Can I at last rise to the challenge..........



Hand grasps firmly at golden hilt.
Angels surround me with ethereal quilt.
The sun breaks through misty sward.
I raise triumphant with vitality's sword!

Author's Note

I have found my sword and after tears of sadness, at last ones of joy.

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

This is an excellent poem you have here. Not only does it bring a nice image in mind but its message, hidden through your lovely choice of words, is inspiring. A favorite of mine is your last line for it really brings the image of triumph, of someone raising their sword up high with sweat glistening on his face.

Now that my friend is a beautiful image you have implanted in my mind.

Nice write :D

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Katherine it turned out rather well in my mind and I seem to be improving at this poetry lark :)

[Rebecca K Pavia]

Another excellent poem. I'm in awe. Of course if it mentions swords, I'm already hooked ;-)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Indeed you cant beat a good sword can you!?

[Ama May Cooper]

Very very nice piece of work here, a strong flow throughout.
And i don't know if this was intentional or not but there seem to be more than one focus on this story.
In parts it sounds a little saucy, like this journey truely is a great discovery , the ending a powerful conclusion.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I had no intention to make this sound erotic perhaps you was just feeling horny when you read it? In which case checkout my poem "Her Perfect Breasts" .

[Ama May Cooper]

I didn't mean erotic as such, just your use of language is very passionate and powerful ... I meant more than there is a sense of an energy much like that of a something sexual within your work.
Will happily check out more of your pieces in a while

[PublishingAgent]

Another fine string to your bow and I love the ending of this piece! Concentrate on A.T.S.W chapter 4 though!!!
I want to know what happens next!! Forget about the poetry for now! LOL :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I am writing chapter 4 but sometimes I need a break so I do the odd poem! :)